Casting shadow on my horizon
as now the sun does set
silent in your wake
is my prayer for peace, and yet...
Comfort does not ease
nor lessen what seems cruel,
if you are no longer there;
my heart, my gem, my jewel.
How do I breathe today
now without your care,
without your voice to wake me
with "I love you" singing there?
How new it all still seems.
Our love of many years
our trials shared, and nurtured
through our dreams and through our fears.
How do I grasp these fleeting days?
How can all of this be true?
And I have not yet loved you enough
for our us, for me, for you.
My lonesome tears already fall
as your golden rays dip low
and oh my love, my partner
how I shall miss you so.
Copyright © 2007
Pamela A. Lamppa
(All Rights Reserved)
A contest entry
- Quickie Picture Prompt Contest by Touchof1der.
475 points, ended September 27, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very beautiful, and is written with such love and excellent imagery. It made me feel moved to tears, full of very tender emotions. This is EXCELLENT
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I almost felt like a peeping tom. This has such a complete aura of being written with someone specific in mind. It makes me feel this was an intensely personal piece. Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck!
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Touchof1der
Thank you for your wonderful comment and the HM. It was indeed written with someone specific in mind. When my ex-mother in law was diagnosed with cancer, I could only imagine what her husband would be going through. They have shared so many years and to have it come to an end like that . . . and then to have my own personal experience in losing someone very dear to this disease made it even that much more personal.
I am so pleased for your comment and the award. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Poignant and touching without be too syrupy. This had a personal resonance for me.
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Dean
Thank you. Me too.
~Pamela 
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Sigh.
oooooh my this just makes me want to shed a few tearz
your wording truly tugs at the heart and soul.
Fantastic work with making the reader feel as they flow through each line,
Warm thoughts
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Frozentearz
Thank you my dear friend. I am so pleased for your comment here. ~Pamela
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brilliant!...a masterful piece bursting with emotions and some killer rhyme and beat...the flow is off the hook...BRAVO!
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aliceramone
Thank you so very much. I am always so pleased with your kind remarks regarding my verse. Thank you. ~Pamela
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