Arise from the ashes and let them disappear in the whisper of the wind
Look to the moon not for guidance but so time can bend
To long has the soul been buried and it arises with a force
Don't you dare cower because you don't know the source
Pettiness is in the world while talent goes wasted
This is one soul that has come to hate it
Why should the graces given be hidden
Where is the law that says succeeding is forbidden
For this is one dark soul who will no longer be bound
Her reign will crash down on those so release the hound
For rage is not any good unless for a good cause
So arise my love and don't you dare pause
For so many have forgotten where the honor lies
It is tiresome to watch as the hearts dream slowly dies
The humanity in the people seems to be gone
But as you awaken show them a new dawn
Constricted by the chains of this sad human form
This wanting to come out is way past the norm
So arise from the dead for the laws have been forgotten
I guess along the way all hope has blown away as if it were cotton
The strong are becoming weak as the weak give in
Only those who are strong enough don't fit in
Arise individuality and be true to your soul
You never know when your great power shall not be whole
Strength is a gift so use and use it well
You never know when something is going to push you to fail
Look beyond the mirror and into the heart and soul
Which way does it tell you to go
If it conflicts stay true to you
If you don't know who that is anymore then don't be blue
For your footing may be lost and your strive may be blinded
But it is you who chooses to embrace it or hide it
A contest entry
- FEELINGS by Liquid memories.
525 points, ended October 8, 2007, 35 entries
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425 points, ended October 9, 2007, 31 entries
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deep.....that is all i can say but then again it is real cool
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Very nice poem. Very flowing and good rhyming. Some forced but overall done very well. This is a very emotional poem and because so came out so well.
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strenth is within the person who believes!!!!
beautifully written and with a wonderful smooth flow to it....
with so much truth throughout......
great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Thank You So Much For entering this wonderful piece of work into my contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!
much much love !!!!!
thank you again and GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
XxLisaJazminexX
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Your writing style has a darkness and flow somewhat like James Dougloas Morrison.
Very well written Congrats!
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thank you for sharing.
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I hesitate to do this and if you don’t want a real review, just ignore mine. I tried to look up three of your words on dictionary.com. No listing for “coware” but it did have “cower”; no listing for “binded”; you might have meant “bound” which of course, doesn’t rhyme. It had “shotten” I did a copy and paste on the definition:
“shot•ten (shŏt'n) Pronunciation Key
adj. Having recently spawned and thus being less desirable as food. Used of fish, especially herring.” “The humanity in the people has seem to have gone” doesn’t need the “has”. “go” is not the best rhyme for “soul”. ‘Hide it” is not the best rhyme for “blinded”.
I can help you if you’d like. OR you can just ignore me completely.
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hmmm one word
ARISE!!
yup damn i like this...seems kinda long though but i still like it...u kno yo ass got talent u need to get dis shyt published and make sum cash ya digg!
Much Luv
♥KAILA♥
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