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Race Day

We jumped in the Chevy, the top was down.
My feet on the dashboard, cooled by the breeze
with red painted toes and slightly bent knees.
He stepped on the gas, took off out of town.
I cranked up the music, he made a frown.
I poked him in the side; he’s such a tease.
We arrived at the track, a big race day.
The car was ready that Timmy would drive,
he strapped himself in, in a macho way.
To win a car race, is what made him thrive.
The green light flashed and his car went astray,
it happened so fast, could Timmy survive?
I’ll never forget that awful race day
'cause I never brought Timmy home alive.

 

 

 

Author notes

Italian (or Petrarchan) Sonnet

The Italian sonnet is divided into two sections by two different groups of rhyming sounds. The first 8 lines is called the octave and rhymes: a b b a a b b a The remaining 6 lines is called the sestet and can have either two or three rhyming sounds, arranged in a variety of ways:
c d c d c d
c d d c d c
c d e c d e
c d e c e d

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  • Cup-a-Joe
    July 20
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    Sad.


  • Tarja
    January 17, 2008

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    This was a GORGEOUS Italian sonnet... i love it. I am very sorry if this is a true story... but either way it was written beautifully. Thank you so much for entering and good luck.


  • StarEyes
    December 20, 2007

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    Amera,

    This is sooooooo sad! I am soooooo sorry for your loss. I can relate to the pain quite well, as you know. I am not sure if I have ever seen one of these forms before, but this is great!

    You know I sit here and try to figure out what to say, but yet the words just do not come.

    Thanks for sharing this with me.. I think maybe I needed this today.

    and love

    Nyetta


  • PerVirtuous
    September 27, 2007
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    This is a treasure to me. I will not comment beyond this except to say thank you for sharing.


  • sunny day
    September 27, 2007

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    Another excellent sonnet produced at the hands of your illustrious pen. Race car drivers are most definitely men of steel nerves. This had a lively beat to it and the ending struck me like an air bag after a head on collision. Thank Heaven for seat belts. Your creativity never ends and this was wonderful. I wish you the best in the contest and thank you for sharing such a golden write with us. Love you my friend, Joyce


    • Amera gold member
      September 27, 2007
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      Thanks Joyce, that would me "men" and woman of steel; huh?


  • captain howdy
    September 26, 2007
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    It started out so light-hearted! Such a twist in the end. I like the Italian sonnet!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 26, 2007

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    Awww, always bad when someone gets killed in a race.
    I was never a racer, but had friends who were, none ever got killed but did get banged up now and then. We'd race in the desert outside of town back in the early 60s, the area we used to race in is now about 30 miles 'inside' of town. Amazing what time does. and yeah I can see you with your painted toes right now just wiggling away like ten lost minnows.



    Dad


  • HaleyMary
    September 26, 2007

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    oh my god. That is so sad. ): Drag racing can be very dangerous and this story sends that message out. This piece reminded me of the scene in "Rebel Without A Cause" in which the Buzz character drives over the cliff while drag racing with the Jim character played by James Dean. This poem had a good form though, as always. You seem to have mastered all the sonnet forms from what I've read. Best of luck to you in the contest.


  • WhisperingSpirit
    September 26, 2007

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    oh my how sad this reminds me so much of teen age draggsters I did not expect this ending when I first started reading amera, you surly can make any poem a master

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