Do you know, that I've been watching over you?
Do you know, that I see what you go through?
You're shutting everyone out,
But you still get thrown about.
You're fighting for life in every way,
You still get knocked down each and every day.
The punches are thrown as you run away,
Wishing that maybe you would've died.
You turn and hide your blood and pain,
As you fall on your knees and cry out to the skies.
Do you know, that I've been watching over you?
Do you know, that I see what you go through?
You're shutting everyone out,
But you still get thrown about.
You're fighting for life in every way,
You still get knocked down each and every day.
Don't think that I don't care,
Because I'm not like them.
I've been watching you run and I've heard you cry,
Maybe tomorrow it'll be alright.
Do you know, that I've been watching over you?
Do you know, that I see what you go through?
You're shutting everyone out,
But you still get thrown about.
You're fighting for life in every way,
You still get knocked down each and every day.
Your running from love from those around you,
You're hiding your pain undeneath it all.
But I've seen the bruises and Ive seen the scars.
Don't tell me those lies about what goes on.
Do you know, that I've been watching over you?
Do you know, that I see what you go through?
You're shutting everyone out,
But you still get thrown about.
You're fighting for life in every way,
You still get knocked down each and every day.
You can come to me when you're hurt and afraid,
I'll always be here even when no one else cares.
Don't try to say that it's all okay.
I've seen the pain and I've heard the screams.
Do you know, that I've been watching over you?
Do you know, that I see what you go through?
You're shutting everyone out,
But you still get thrown about.
You're fighting for life in every way,
You still get knocked down each and every day.
Author notes
Blue-Eyed Vampyre
A contest entry
- Magnify The Lord!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! by Talking Toni.
1000 points, ended March 31, 2008, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter the very first poem you posted by whispernthedark.
435 points, ended March 26, 2008, 50 entries
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Comments
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oh my god. you're obviously a true friend. one would be lucky to call you a friend. i have met few people like you. (sorry, i'm judging you based off of a poem i read for a contest) lol. anyway i understand what its like to be the one on the outside looking in. trying to help your friends but you don't know what to do. i loved reading this. good luck and good write.
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Your message is true, very well written. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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He Is Watching Over Us...............
All...even when we do not deserve his protection. And sometimes things happen to us even as a small child but we have to have faith that he will turn what the devil meant for evil into his good!!! Thanks for your entry and the best of luck in the contest!!!~~Toni~~ -
Deep Truth!!
Wow, this is very well written. It comes across like it could be lyrics to a song with the chorus being repeated.
All too often, people don't believe there is a G-d in heaven watching over them if they are going through terrible things in this life.
All too often, people harden their hearts and think if He were real, He wouldn't let them suffer in such ways.
I was once one of those people, but now I can look back on life and see He was always there and that everything that happened in my life happened for a reason.
This is an excellent poem filled with the truth that He is really there through it all.
Great Job!
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Well written. This is exactly the type of thing people in this group do. e watch over people, just like the "Knightmare Clan". I think maybe the repeating of one stanza is a little too much, and maybe the end could be added to or re-worded for more strength. It seems a little weak to me. But still. Nicely done. Thanks for posting it.
xx The Fallen xx
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well....it was written spur of the moment on my laptop, on the train with about 50 other people talking really really loud. so....yeah.
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You describe my childhood, except no one was watching me. Very nice.
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