It roars
"I am"
through every cell,
every crystalline movement
to drop me in
a pool of serenity,
of safe knowledge
that the fall was worth
each touch of green birth
along its way.
In a list
A contest entry
- The Fall Of Water - Ends in about 6 hours by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended September 26, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I wrote better than that one!!! by Tattboyspet.
800 points, ended September 28, 2007, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I absolutely love this one. Beautiful writing...
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loved it...beauty & delicately put
the word " I AM" have so many meanings personally,
and even spiritually, in many holy books...prophecies
always start with the powerful words, "I AM"
and when we find ourselves in a defiant moment, isn't
it interesting, that we too...scream out ..whisper out..
"I AM" we are all certainly all a part of each other
in this creation earth, whether we like it or not!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
really good writer you are!
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Thank you for your awesome comments on all my poems today. Thank you for this one - I added the "I Am" for exactly that person. Thanks for looking at this with an eye to analyse it. Your compliment is really appreciated too.
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Short piece, yet in the few lines it contains enough imagery to keep the minds eye going for a good long while.
Good write and congrats on silver.
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Thank you so much. I hoped to get that effect with this piece. Thanks for commenting and making me smile.
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wonderful write here ... simple, short and to the point (my favourite types of writes
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thank you for your entry
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Thanks my friend for the trophy on this. I really appreciate your support and love. You are a beautiful person. Please stay that way.
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I'd be a rich man if I got paid for falling in love with a dream. Even without the money it's worth it. Best of luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Thank you Leo. Sheesh I only just figured out how to change the rating of a comment so you are one of the first to receive an upgrade. If only all our dreams could be turned into wealth ... *hugs*
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okay, if THIS doesn't get the gold, then I just don't know!!!! This is an exceptional piece my friend - it screamed at me with passion - thank you for sharing
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It didn't but I loved writing it in any case. Thanks for your unconditional support in my writing C. I really love you to bits.
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oh I simply love the ending liens of this poem....we are always being reborn..like the waterfalls...yes yes yes..
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I am glad you liked it so much. Thanks for a wonderful contest.
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this poem made me thirsty....... excellent write good luck with the contest
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Thank you Jarrod. Your comment made me smile.
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"the fall was worth
each touch of green birth
along its way."
Beautiful, my Friend. As I told someone else, it's a good thing I didn't read the entries first. Good luck in Carol's contest, Sweetie. 
Wanda
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Congratulations on your trophy - it deserved it. Thank you for taking the time to read my piece and comment on it. IUt is always appreciated.
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Wonderful
Such a soothing poem you created as if water was being poured over the mind. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you. I was hoping to create that kind of an effect.
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Beautiful write. Water is so much of what we are, about 70% from what I've read. I liked the part of green birth the best. It made me think of how much of the Earth is covered in water and how important water is for life to flourish. Good luck in the contest and thanks so much for the comments on "Quantum Relativity" and "How Earth Got It's Name".
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Thank you my friend. I loved reading your work and will be back soon.
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very nice and descriptive...good luck in the contest...Leaf
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Thank you so much leaf. I really appreciate the comment.
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