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the Flight

 

 

The Flight began before the passengers knew
There was a destination and need to go
The better part of them took off and flew
Where they are going is not for us to know

There was a destination and a need to go
The mind discovers the souls intent in time
Where they are going is not for us to know
As the unknown being ever so sublime

The mind discovers the souls intent in time
We jump for joy with wanting to climb on board
As the unknown being ever so sublime
We cannot go but still attempt an accord


We jump for joy with wanting to climb on board
Soaring upon the energy of light strings
We cannot go but still attempt an accord
Basking in the impossible gifts love brings


Soaring upon the energy of light strings
The better part of them took off and flew
Basking in the impossible gifts love brings
The flight began before the passengers knew

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • kendhal22
    September 30, 2007

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    WoW! awesome

    trully love the poem. envokes a deeper meaning in the story which I loved. My fav. part: There was a destination and a need to go
    The mind discovers the souls intent in time
    Where they are going is not for us to know
    As the unknown being ever so sublime
    Kendhal22









  • Denierim
    September 27, 2007

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    This is such a beautiful piece. It's quite of a flight we all go to in our lives, never really noticing before the very end. But the flight of love is always the one that people enjoy the most.

    I love the flow in this piece and the words are simple beautiful, crafting up a story filled with emotions and love. This really shows the emotions so very well, letting the reader feel them too. I do admit, that the starting/ending line wasn't deep and dramatic enough for my taste but that's just me. I liked this change, reading a steadily going piece for a change!

    Beautiful, beautiful work and good luck in the contest!


  • Amera gold member
    September 26, 2007

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    This is beautiful and well complsed in form. I smile when I read poetry like this and when it's your poetry, I smile more. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • HaleyMary
    September 26, 2007

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    Beautiful poem. Great poetic form. This write made me think of life and how death can sometimes come at unexpected times. Like, we may be going about our day like it was any other day and it's not until it's too late and we can't undo what has already been done. Good luck in the contest.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    September 26, 2007

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    Awesome Pantoum, awesome poem, exciting read Good luck in the contestlol


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 26, 2007

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    As always, you reign supreme with
    form poetry...lovely flow, allan...
    lovely poem. Love, Lane


  • myrataal silver member
    September 26, 2007

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    Wonderful and Filled with Light ...

    and warmth ... Reading this poem, with its lovely pantoumic repetition, made me want to chant its joy! And I simply adored the exit line:

    The flight began before the passengers knew

    Drifting off into Love's embrace ...

    Always
    Myra

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