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Golden Lace

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Golden Lace

 

 

‘Twas early morn and dressed in lace
Yet I forlorn be it the case
The sun had yet to break the day
I shan’t forget the slight delay
A post had come addressed to me
A mystery some may think it be

I held it tight; what could it be?
It came last night in evening lace
I did relax for ‘twas the case
And sealed in wax ‘till the next day
So here I am without delay
The thoughts that swam, it came for me

Beautiful script addressed to me
I pulled and ripped what could it be?
The parchment now a tattered lace
I wiped my brow that was the case
The letter said ‘twould change my day
‘twas penned in blood; a slight delay

Instructions said without delay
To go ahead, ‘twas up to me
While it’s still dark, in the forest be
You must embark all dressed in lace
And you will find a magic case
It’s just behind the break day

I jumped with glee that fateful day
And ran to see without delay
A golden case awaiting me
So I did race where I should be
I found it near a tree of lace
And it was clear, a magic case

I held it tight, opened the case
The letter was right it changed my day
Within the box with no delay
There were no locks to hinder me
Out came a mist for it would be
A magic mist of golden lace

It happen to me I found the case
I opened it without delay on that perfect day
It was a mist of golden lace that came to be

 

 

 

Author notes

Sestina with internal rhyme

Art Work by Imagoo

http://www.deviantart.com/print/639543/

The sestina is a strict ordered form of poetry, dating back to twelfth century French troubadours. It consists of six six-line (sestets) stanzas followed by a three-line envoy. Rather than use a rhyme scheme, the six ending words of the first stanza are repeated as the ending words of the other five stanzas in a set pattern. The envoy uses two of the ending words per line, again in a set pattern.

First stanza, ..1 ..2 ..3 ..4 ..5 ..6
Second stanza, ..6 ..1 ..5 .. 2 ..4 ..3
Third stanza, ..3 ..6 ..4 ..1 ..2 ..5
Fourth stanza, ..5 ..3 ..2 ..6 ..1 ..4
Fifth stanza, ..4 ..5 ..1 ..3 ..6 ..2
Sixth stanza, ..2 ..4 ..6 ..5 ..3 ..1

Concluding tercet:
middle of first line ..2, end of first line ..5
middle of second line ..4, end of second line..3
middle if third line ..6, end of third line ..1

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  • penman gold member
    October 7, 2007
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    Excellent

    oh my such an incredible use of the form. Such a skillful and creative poem. Another masterpiece.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    September 30, 2007

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    Oh such a labor of love dear poetess with this remarkable Sestina. Such a difficult form so I KNOW the effort placed here. Simply perfect with the image, yet needs no image to stand within its beauty.

    bravo! ~Pamela


  • Touchof1der gold member
    September 30, 2007

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    My daughter writes in this form. You have done a lovely job here and the flow is so fluid and beautiful. Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der

  • JinSays gold member
    September 27, 2007

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    Captivating read, I couldn't breathe until the very end. That it was a sestina didn't strike me at first, so I read it again. Even better the second time.
    Beautiful.
    Jin


  • captain howdy
    September 26, 2007

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    Very suspenseful! I love the internal rhymes! I haven't tried to rhyme internally, myself. I think I might start.

  • Arzab
    September 26, 2007

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    Beautiful write, Amera. Wonderful poetic form. This piece seemed magical in a way. Like, the suspense of wondering what something is in the box when a person receives a gift. Good luck in the contest.


  • WhisperingSpirit silver member
    September 26, 2007

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    Wonderful write my friend
    This all brought a picture of the olden days to my mind, Oh the way you penned this was so full of reflection with in the mindwhat a wonderful read
    You did amzaling


  • Pisces Pieces
    September 26, 2007

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    I don't really know how to comment I love the way you carry the reader through a story, and I imagine most, like me, are eager to see what comes to be in the end.
    Some of these forms seem amazingly complicated to me, and you seem to do them so extremely well. I feel like the form used often compliments the story that is being told.

    And anyway This is beautiful and captivating, I loved it!


  • The Voice Of One
    September 26, 2007

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    upon your page it's plain to see
    a teachers pet I aim to be
    for form this is no other cure
    you write them well and oh so pure

    so with this little bit of fruit
    I hope that you will win the loot
    and show us all this class you see
    the ones below, and now, yes me!

    Another added education in the fine art you master.


  • Faeryn
    September 26, 2007

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    wow...this is simply amazing! I'll add anoyher comment later...when I'm not studying for my spanish exam! have a great day!
    -Tay-


  • TwilightPanther Moderators member
    September 26, 2007

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    BREATH TAKING

    You do make this Mother proud my love I envy your wonderful talent...A beautiful case filled golden lace...Magic in the making...My little Form Queen you truly are


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 26, 2007

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    Amera,

    you know what this is don't you? Its a sestina about how a woman discoveres love, unexpected or not, for males it is similar, at least mature males (if there truly is such a thing?) has happened to me more than once, far more than once, hope it happens a dozen more times.



    dad


  • Allan Emery silver member
    September 26, 2007

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    Wow. You are once again showing why you are the form queen. This is wonderful. I love everything about it. Three more bunnies.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    September 26, 2007

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    oh this is very nice, I do love the internal rhymes in this piece,nice for,but oh those syllabol count lol good job on this good luck..mm

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