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Spun Sugar








What is Desire?
Rockhard candy
made in the pot at home
or soft cotton candy snatched out of the chrome,

it gets filled up
it's always hungry for more,
it pulls the taffy from the stick
it rocks back and forth
like a tuning fork,
it hums.

I should know.
Pumping on the churn
my hands slack
making butter on the porch
talking to another likely lass,
gazing at the front
of the candy store
looking through the glass
at the fancy fancy wrappers,
her eyes turned.

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Ms. Desire.
Written September 30th, 2003

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  • twisted butterfly
    October 3, 2003
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    very naughty. or so it would seem. maybe its my mind

    Lisa x


  • santori
    October 1, 2003
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    Sugar Spun Sister. '...sticky fingered boy...'. I've been listening to a lot of the Stone Roses lately. This is good. Tasty.


  • symitar Moderators member
    September 30, 2003
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    A yummy poem, full of sweet delights that conjure up confections that tickle delicious memories. I can remember some tasty moments, for sure. Sweet, indeed.

    ~ becky


  • September 30, 2003
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    This brought back childhood taffy pulls in mom's kitchen with buttered hands and mouth watering waiting for it to cool enough to get that first bite. It is funny how things change. As a teen my dad owned a grocery store and my part-time job was working behind the candy counter. I got so I hated to look at candy. Sorry to say that did not last. Loved this poem! Irene


  • Desire gold member
    September 30, 2003
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    LOVED IT

    Damn! ~Candy~ I love it and love to eat it tooooo~ Sweet tooth I have~ Mmmmmmm This was sensual and the body said holy smokes~ The fire alarm just went off~ me Lute~ I enjoyed this very much and honored~ The imagery gave me some ideas of what to eat~ Thank you sweetie~ Appreciate you tremendously~ Big hugs and much love~ Desire


  • crestfallen
    September 30, 2003
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    Oh delicious!! I think I might like a gander at that candy store! Very origional idea here, I like how you put it all together, your flow works well with the concept and the rhythm carries it flawlessly to the end. You've got one great talent! This piece has definately made it's way to my bookmarks.

    Crestfallen


  • Manicmuze
    September 30, 2003
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    you've tickled my sweet tooth (licking lips) :-)

    what a tasty treat this is,
    ~ Wendy

  • GypsyDreamer
    September 30, 2003
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    Ohh first one I hit on the new list... and it's so yummy.
    lol 'her eyes on the front of the candy store' looked good i'm sure. Ahhh desire and temptation... loved it

    GypsyDreamer


  • NurseChilly gold member
    September 30, 2003
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    Well Mr Lute.. you turning heads again?? oh,my I do delcare is that butter on your lap sir??

    CUTE WRITE.. me liked!!!

    ~GILL~xxx

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