If I could have you
For one more night
To kiss your lips
And squeeze you tight
I'd give you the world
And all of my love
All of the stars
In the Heaven above
I can't explain
The way that I feel
All I know is that
This love is for real
So take my hand
And together we'll fly
Into another world
In the starlit sky
If there's ever a time
That you need a friend
I'll always be here for you
Until the end
The love we share
Will burn a fire
For only you can quench
My love and desire
I'd walk the world
Climb the highest high
Darling for you,
I'd touch the sky
I'll always be here
Whenever you need me
Like a bird on your shoulder
You can count on me
I'll always love you
Wherever you are
No matter how near
No matter how far
The times we shared
The times we kissed
The times we cried
I'll reminisce
Darling remember,
When you see it through
I'll always be here
For the love of you
Author notes
This is the first poem that I ever wrote. It has brought me very far in my writing career. I hope that you enjoy it! Thanks for reading!
I am a Male
A contest entry
- Calling all Romeos and Juliets by PonyPride.
425 points, ended January 23, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bring on the Cliche Poetry!! by masky.
1800 points, ended June 5, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I don't care if this is your first write, or you last write, this write was the best write I've ever seen written. It's romantic, loving, caring, and it's everything any woman could ever ask for. You have the power for words, you know how to use them and you use them well. This was a very emotional piece ... and it's something a woman like myself would die to receive! This person is/was very luck!
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i love this poem..it was very touching...especially for your 1st write..great job..keep writing
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Wow! This is beautiful. I'm amazed that this was your first
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For a first poem, this is wonderful!
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Any lady would be lucky to have this written for. It literally made me heart melt (And I've been told I'm quite cold sometimes!) - It is, as far as I've read, the only poem in which I actually didn't focus on the size, line measure, and all of that, because is was simply stunningly emotional! However, I did read it out loud and I noticed some stumbly areas - it's up to you if you follow my suggestions or not:
"I can't explain
The way that I feel
All I know is
This love is for real"
Maybe a rephrasing of the last two lines?
Like:
"All that I know
Is that love is for real", therefore referring to all the love in the world. That might be just me ^_^
For your first poem...WOW! I am astonished! Simply beautiful! You made it on the finalists' list!
Congratulations, and good luck!
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Very romantic
I really liked this. It was romantic and very touching. ...a very gentle poem. Great work! -
OMG OMG, this was a damn good poem i loved it
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wow asome 4 seven years old
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the idea was to see 2 versions. This one and an edited one; or if this is the final version than what it was like before. How did you get it like this?
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WOW this was your first write! OMG!!! You have beautiful romance and emotion going on here! This is just stunning to say the least...and the one I read from you yesterday that you co wrote ...OMG!!! YOUR A MASTER!
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Great flow and rhyme!!! Love how it is so verrrryyyy romantic,
loving and so touching to the heart!! Great emotional piece you have penned! And this was your first?? Wow.. nicely done!
I wish you all the best in the contest!
Linda
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