Passing planets know secrets untold
while silently crossing
the insignificant distance
between us.
Dreams in silhouette
are too tangibly vague to be held dear.
All the while, the solemn songs
sung by downward cast peddles
puddle and pour about my soul…
How small the universe;
how far tomorrow;
how great the empty places
where love once grew
now time stands still.
Author notes
image from contest holder
A contest entry
- Quickie Picture Prompt Contest by Touchof1der.
475 points, ended September 27, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on your silver hun!
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Congratulations
I am so pleased to see a trophy on this piece dear. It is exceptionally well written and truly deserves this and much much more. Well done. Time to CELEBRATE!! 
Congratulations. ~Pamela 
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This is such an amazing poem. The sheer feeling of pain and misery. Yet beauty just seeps its steady flow through the words that move across the page here. Each line is so emotive and racked with an all too well known reality for some that it left me literally frozen in place. Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck!
♥ Touchof1der -
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thank you for these kind words an awesome prompt and the shiny cup.
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Wonderful
Oh my, this is so sad, and so true of relationships that dim and fade, or those that held promise, yet simply could never be...dreams only in silhouette...shadowed moments that could never measure in full light... This piece leaves me quite humbled.
Excellent take on the prompt, though this piece needs no image to hold its power. Very very well done my dear. Very well done.
~Pamela
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Sorry I haven't commented in so long, just this was so eloquent, and dare I say beautiful. The spacing reminded me almost of real dirty pretty, (which I love by the way) in the way you just say it so that it hits harder and better and yeah I just lovee this.
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Very well done.
Nice take on the prompt!
Good luck in the contest!
*PEACE*
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Your words here have an all too familiar feel to me. They fill the heart with a sadness that weighs the mind with unanswered questions of both past and future. So somber a feel and still so beautiful! Excellent! Best of luck to you hun...
Bel
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