Softly, with the whisper of a breeze,
your lips caress my neck.
The merest breath
dances with a lightness
between the goose bumps.
Reacting to the roller coaster within,
I turn to reach for you;
only to find you not there,
but rather, only an anticipation
of what awaits your return.
So vivid are my memories of you.
©2007 rous
9-25-07
Author notes
Written for the contest: Sensual Feelings/ Adults Only by a-bear
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2370822
A contest entry
- Sensual Feelings/ Adults Only by piccola.
700 points, ended October 1, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP Book Contest: Get Published! (Last Chance!) by tinuelena.
1200 points, ended December 12, 2007, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A critical comment is invited
Comments
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I like this piece. Short, though very effectively leading the reader into the sight and emotion of the piece. Very dreamlike.
Good write and congrats on bronze.
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Thank you. It is always gratifying to know that what you write is understood.
rous
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this gave me so many feelings. Things I relate to...words I relate to. Nice feelings too. Thank you.
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You are quite welcome. And, thank you for reading and commenting. Not to mention the placing and points!
rous
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WOW what a great entry in this contest
Well done and good luck in the contest
delila
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Thank you. I appreciate your reading and commenting. And, your well wishes; it paid off.
rous
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