The click of my head as the lights seem to fade,
Push back the thoughts, giving tongue free reign,
I fall to my knees losing myself in the phrase,
"Lord, take me instead, let him be okay..."
The imagined horrors while I wait in my room,
Wait for the story that will put my heart back in tune,
I surrender all else because I just can't hold
on to the troubles while I pretend to be old
My thoughts just a buzz, you're words all I see
holding so tight like the words are the key
to fixing his bones, to healing his skin
This prayer is what puts him together again.
Author notes
My brother was hit by a train last year, and survived. That alone is a miracle, and I believe he survived mostly because of the large amount of people (including myself) that prayed for him for hours straight.
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this is such a very heartfelt piece...a testimony that indeed miracles are true if we have hope in God...thank you for sharing this lovely write...
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this is a nice poem. I enjoied reading it. Thanks for entering my contest. Please feel free to check out the group.
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Well done. The first stanza, with its concluding prayer, is particularly smooth and rhymical in just the right way to highlight the situation. Very well done.
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this is such a lovely poem...a sincere write to testify a miraculuous act of God's mercy...your brother is truly lucky to survive and moreover he is blessed with so many people loving him and God who truly loves him so...God bless you and your brother...
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Thanks for your report of such good news. Thanks for your entry into this contest as well. lol
that was a blessing
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I find myself feeling quite weepy as I read this. Praise the Lord for this miracle. And a beautiful poem to commemorate it.
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