Dawn sips chilled Fall mists
revealing brilliant fruit zests
splashed on my hillside
Author notes
as instructed: "This is a great form of poetry that flows from my thoughts, though the picture I see is greater, I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse
A contest entry
- Autumn Haiku by InBetweenThoughts by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended September 28, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Autumn Haiku II by InBetweenThoughts Finalist of previous contest only, http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2370440 by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended October 1, 2007, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very Cool
this is quite a nice poem and I really enjoy the way it was written. any ways nice work all round with this poem good wording and flow and deptht through out keep up the good work
congrats on the HM trophy
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Thank you for your patience and for resubmitting your poem!
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This is a perfect Haiku. You capture the essence of the season both in beauty and in experience. That fact that you describe the colors on the hillside as fruit zests brings a whole new feel and appeal to the various senses that any a mere visual description would have done. Very skillful use of limited words. Really impressive.
Enjoy your autumn!
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Thank you for your encouraging comment and clappies! I really appreciate your positive feedback, as it is a new form for me
So happy I can pick from my apple tree each morning! Yum!
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A wonderful Autumn Haiku, great imagery and form..reminds me of my yard with the fallen apples, black walnuts and pine cones I pick up daily
thank you for your entry, best wishes, Ken IBT
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