Skeletons, the cross bones
And I wanted to go home.
"Mommy, this is scary," I sobbed
As my little frightened heart throbbed.
"Oh, don't worry, it'll be fun!
Think about the candy, you'll get some."
Right then I put on a big grin
And my mom tapped my little chin.
I walked down a very long driveway
Which seemed, to me, like a highway
When I got to the house, I opened my sack
And I gave the lady a nice smile back
She gave me two lollipops, and two more with that
And my small little heart almost had an attack
I looked up at my mom, smiling and blinking,
So she looked back at me, silently winking.
We went to the next house, oh, what glee,
All the man did was smile at me.
I smiled at him back-
Then he filled up my sack!
he just laughed--
But I giggled back.
Halloween was very fun,
'Cause I wasn't the only one.
Plus, since there was so much candy,
It was sweet-- so fine and dandy!!
Author notes
I'm 11.
Option 2, choice D.
My sister pointed out the poem is shaped like a piece of candy.
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Comments
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This is really a cute piece and depicts the loot of Halloween well LOL I like the imagery you’ve used in this one and it really brings back memories of my youth as well. A good Halloween piece.
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This is so cute, I adore it. Well done!
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Oh the sweet jopy of Halloween
Though as leander said too much candy can give you tummy ache but he forgot to mention it can create many trips to the dentist too But even so it's still so good..lol Thank you for entering and best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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Too much candy can give you some severe stomach ache (and I had once an overload of it - lol)
I think you have described this very well here, and I actually like the story you told - well done!
Thank you for entering the contest, I wish you the best of luck
Leander -
too cute
I think you'll always out do me, lol this is a cute little story and I love the rhyme, why not come to my site sometime. I think we'll get along just fine.
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Thanks for your entry
Aww, this is so sweet, was this a first Halloween story. That is what it seemed to me. I really love it. Good job here, you have a good flow and structure. I do think it looks like a piece of candy.
Happy Halloween
Tammy
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Very cute! Wow, I can't believe you're only eleven! You have a real talent. The rhyme and style and rhythm all are used wonderfully to shape this into a delicious piece. The flow is almost perfect and the ending fits it. Great job here. Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest
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Awwww
This is sooo cute, very well written indeed. Best of luck in the contest! -
adorable
this is the cutest halloween poem i think i have ever read! i can just picture it. oh how i love trick or treating. and i love the line about the driveway being a highway bc its just like you are in the childs head. it really is very good description and mind interpretation. its brilliant.
good luck in this contest. i havent read any of the other entries but this one already won me over. -
This is a wonderful Halloween poem. Your 11? This is great and told a cute story as well. Good luck in this contest. I think you deserve gold!
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nice rhyming.its hard to believe your so young.you would think you would be around 17
I think ya did great
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This was very good. It was a pleasure to read. Your rhymeing was perfect, you have a lot of talent. Keep up the great work.
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Haha... this is even better than the last one. Couple of extra letters in there, obviously by accident. Line 11 "poened" instead of "opened" and "mujch" in the second to last line. Loved this, great Halloween write!
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