talk to the mirror, choke back tears && keep telling yourself 'im a diva'
[[shes just a regular walking contradiction]]
step in;; step out
.a jeffree star wannabe.
broken glass
crash;;
((is she more than you bargined for yet doll??))
think you can handle this backburner emergency??
just a disaster [waiting to happen]
ripping out
page after page
as she bleeds [she's just a glitter fan wannabe]
as fake as the clothes she wears
[it's a black & white world]
for the glam and the fame
.now.again.
look in the mirror && keep telling yourself 'im a diva'
[because this was no accident, this was a theripeutic chain of events]
slowly killing the girl she used to be.
Author notes
talk to the mirror,choke back tears&&keep telling yourself 'im a diva'
A contest entry
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400 points, ended October 2, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
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loved this one. good write!!!
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Im not quit sure about this one. Not sure wether to remove it, say I like it, say its not what I wanted. I'll have to sleep on this one.......
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Wow that was deifently imagery. I like it, you made it very exciting and very dramatic and very creative.It has its own little tune and it doenst sway back and forth. Nice beat, nice rhythem. Nice lines!! Thank you very much and best of luck to you!! :]
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[it's a black & white world]
for the glam and the fame
awesome lines! I couldn't help but notice that you quoted Panic! At The Disco... Wonderful band! Makes me wanna dance! Haha. great write.
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Very interesting write.
I loved the way you used panic @ the disco lyrics in this fab dirty pretty poem. They fitted well, and I loved reading it.
J.M xooo
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now i love when i ts not over uses and you did a great job on it here. best wishes. couple of honorable mentions i feel it was wotrthy of much more.
my opinion anyhow.
tory
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good job!
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Oh, beautiful dirty pretty, though this poem wasn't an imedate attraction, it was well done. It is not exactly origanal. But it is well done. I throughly enjoyed this piece. I love almost all the lines (which is practically a miracle since I usally don't go for dirty pretty, and since I usally don't like the whole of most poems )
Beautiful job, I really enjoyed this piece. -
i think that if youre going to use lines from other people or bands, then you need to at least say who actually wrote the line in you authors comment box.
over all this poem didn't stick out to me.
the word choice is a bit old "glam, fake, glitter". would have been more interesting if you had twisted it into something more original. Because, after all, pieces like this are a dime a dozen now a days.
Anyway. Good luck in the contests.
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no one uses the words anymore because the were over cliched...
thats WHY I used them.
In moderation these words have a strong impact.
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I love the Jeffree Star reference. Good work honey.
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[it's a black & white world]
for the glam and the fame
that and the last lines♥
luv it
Dead Star--x -
this is very nice.
I looove panic at the discos lyrics
& it fitted in well here.
Just a little mistake though..
its "jeffree star" not " geffory star "
but other than that its awesome.
xx
♥
ilyy
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