Jerking me out of conversation and into Your presence
Your eyes found mine, across a sea of mindless banter.
i could feel the grip of Your fingers around my arm,
and knew there was no walking away.
Somehow i knew knew You.
my soul cried out to You
my need evidant
my desire to serve, lay transparant before You.
my naked emotions
Carved open for Your inspection
Barely alive
Barely aware
Then You touched me.
Undeniable strength
Unmistakable power
Masked in humanity.
You had me from that first moment.
Hot breath on the back of my neck
Knees bending
Head bows
As i submit myself to Your will.
Devotion surges
Like a wild river of hot molten lava
Winding through my veins
Expanding my heart.
Beautifully crafted
Polished perfection
Tight and unyielding
Your fingers fasten Your circle of gold around my neck.
A contest entry
- The Most Important Person to you ... by xHeartofDarknessx.
300 points, ended October 2, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BDSM by Exodus.
300 points, ended November 4, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Very beautiful and strong poem. Very close to the best I've ever read
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Thank You so much...that is such a sweet thing to say. i am just glad You enjoyed it and that You understood the feelings which created it. Thank You.
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This was absolutely beautiful. I'm glad you managed to capture that feel of ownership and belonging without needed to delve into some of the more obvious roads. I really enjoyed reading this, and I'll say it again; it was beautiful.
Thank you.
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Thanks so much...He is wonderful, and i am so lucky to have Him. He truly makes my submission joyful.
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The last line was just the cherry on top ...
Now, who could this lucky person be ... ???
JUST KIDDING!
You deserve all the happiness that you can get my friend and it sounds as though he's giving it to you
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