In His hands I feel safe
no harm can come to me
for He holds me to his breast
and whispers "I love thee."
In His hands There is love
this gift He gave to me
It is this gift of love
that set my spirit free.
In His hands there is life
I am not alone
He met me there at Heaven's gate
and softly said "Come Home."
I am sorry Mom and Dad
for leaving you so soon
even though I'm in His hands
He is there with you.
In a list
A contest entry
- " Contest" Pictorial Inspirations ,from Babies, to Dogs, Revolutionary and Civil War Buffs, to Senior Citizens by LovinCharmer.
800 points, ended October 5, 2007, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
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550 points, ended April 5, 52 entries
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811 points, ended April 16, 109 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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agin love it
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Aww... this one was so
deeply sad and heartfelt.
Really made me want to
cry at the end.
What a blow of emotions.
This was beautiful, truly.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Beautiful.
I love this poem. I know how much it hurts to lose someone who you loved so dearly, even if it was for only a little while. That being said, I couldn't honestly fathom what you must have gone through in your lifetime [I'm saying this in respect to your other poem about the loss of the gentle soul, Caleb] I'm getting the vibe that this poem is also about him.
The thing I like most about your poems is that they always make me think about the deeper meanings of life.
Take care!
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No
It's hard to give a poem that reads so personal a "no" in this contest, and yet in all fairness I know it would not score well compared to many of the poems I've read tonight. I am glad to have had the opportunity to read it though. Thanks so much for sharing this in the POY, and good luck in all your writing endeavors.
Best wishes,
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I'm sorry to see that Jim gave this a no, but I can see where he's coming from. -
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It is overly sentimental in my opinion. There is a huge difference between a poem that is emotional and one that is sentimental.
Hey, it's only my opinion.
Thanks for the entry. -
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thank you anyway
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Yes ~
As special as this Theme is to me, I found it to be very close to a *No* ~
The only reason I will say Yes, is because I think it has merit ~
I'm glad this has won Gold in the past ~
Good luck to you,
Bear ~
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Thank you, this has so much meaning to me and I am glad you enjoyed the read.
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Excellent write
ASuch beautiful poetry you have written it is amongst the best on this sight
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Very Nice poem Sweety I wish you the best of luck in the Poy Congratulations on the Gold trophy you won before
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This is such an amazingly beautiful write. I love it. Congrats on the gold.
Best wishes,
-Nessa
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BEautiful this is such a touching poem! I love it you captured my attention from the very beggining!!It is this gift of love
that set my spirit free.
Fantastic Job what more can I say!!!
~Ocean~
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congrats on the goldie
well written poem.I looked at it with a couple different pt of views. innocence purveys.
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A delightful piece...
A delightful piece; it is comforting to know that He is always there, with His hands towards us; nicely done. --Joe
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a very positive and uplifting spiritual message of hope, very eloquently conveyed! thank you for sharing this piece!
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this is a fantastic piece, i felt the sad emotion of a lost child and the happiness of knowing said child is safe in Gods hands. thank you for the entry and i wish you well
cheers
jen
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Oh I like this, the very essence of your words leaves me feeling like you've just sang a lullaby or that I'm sitting in a rocking chair peacefully. I liked it and it is so true.
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insperational
this gives a since of peace and spirituality and makes me want to give to my mom and dad since they are far away
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Great poem on the prompt, it actually gave me shivers reading this and good luck in the contest.
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A wonderful take on the picture prompt. Very sad yet with a hint of hope at the end. Though he/she left the parents, they are now with God as He is with the parents. Well done. I love this write. Wonderfully touching write. Good luck in the contest.
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verygood
This is lovely and very sad to lose a child I share your pain as I know what this is like.I send Gods love and blessings to you .And thank you for your kind comments to me also . -
such an amazing piece that made me cry...
You have such an elegant knack for rhythm and rhyme. This spiritual piece about the loss of your child is a blessing. I am so sorry for your loss. God bless you for sharing this.
By the way, I completely agree with you about some critiques. I've read some incredible poems that just got tore apart in critique. I believe that constructive criticism can be very helpful, but when it's doing nothing, but hindering a poet from growing, it's pointless. Poets like the late e.e. cummings, for instance, who was known for pushing the grammatical limits in his poetry, had many beautiful works published. I'm glad that you pointed that out. I have something similar written in my author page. Everyone has their own style of writing. My wife has dyslexia, but has been writing beautiful poetry since she was 16. She has a very difficult time writing small words that look backwards to her.
Knight70
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amazing
this is such a spiritual poem and was put into the right words its really sad but with a sense of serenity and peace with the inner soul well done! i really love this poem
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oh wow. that is absolutely.. amazing. nice and short and beautiful . wow. but the last part is a lil sad though :'( but i love this poem. thanku for sharing
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wonderful ... this poetry is full of emotion on every level thank you for sharing
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wow! simply WOW! This gave me a chill (the good kind) and even made me tear up. I love how well placed your rhymes and words are!
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Powerful,
Thanks for sharing such heartfelt words,
you have a very wonderful talent, and sweet soul! All the best within this contest, peace, Timothy
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awww mum
this is so sweet n true
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I can feel your emotions and beliefs coming out through this poem. You painted a picture, and it's truly beautiful.
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a very heart felt poem here I agree with Lc...spiritually it leads to hope.loss of a child is so sad but hope of seeing her at heavens gate, good poem good luck in the contest ..mm
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Outstanding Piece
Great Job.. I can almost feel the love in your unspoken words. You have brought style and grace to a beautiful picture, This is definately one of my favorites. Thank You for entering my contest and Good Luck........................L -
Wowzers!
This is stunningly beautiful and you wrote this with the gift of an angel, tasting it like a fine wine, smooth and gentle...AWESOME!
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Wow, this is beautiful. Such a lovely picture it would be difficult to do it justice with mere words, and yet, somehow, you succeded. Simple, wonderful rhythm... just outstanding work here.
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aw.nice.
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Absolutely Beautifuly Done.
My first impression is that this is beautifuly done. Emotionally it brings the truth of Gods love out in a very real way. Your poem is very remarkable. The way in which you wrote this from the perspective of either a stillborn or a newborn is astounding. The love of God for this child is evident in every word you have written. I just love everything about this and hope that you win this contest, as your poem is so very well written. The tenderness, careing and loveing thoughts speak of a very tender heart.
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wow, seems very powerful. you have a sense of peace in this poem even though the narrarator knows what's happening. nice job.
Monica <3
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Oh you have done a nice job with this piece. Thank you for sharing and goodluck to you in the contest.Best wishes
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