A human mortal,
Knowing not
His fate now waking
For the wrath wraught;
"Juggernaught."
Slowly he
Will rise from slumber
And now I pluck out
His one number
"Juggernaught!"
Watch him quiet
In the shadows
Coming closer
To El Dorado's
"Juggernaught."
He turns the corner
In an alley
Not alone
Begin the rally
"Juggernaught!"
He looks so frightened
Feeble, old
And for a moment,
It takes me hold
"Juggernaught?"
He whimpers softly
Should I do it?
Should I take hold
Of his life; ruin it?
"Jug...Jugger.... JUGGERNAUGHT!!!!"
Screaming savage
Temptation fading
Swinging down
With my scythe blading
"JUGGERNAUGHT!!!!"
A soul I rent tonight.
He had so much fright
Now I leave no light
Remember my name earned by rites.
"Juggernaught."
A contest entry
- AllPoetry Extravaganza--3 Month Gold and Silver Membership by Violet Moodswing.
1500 points, ended November 28, 2007, 67 entries
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Jugggernaught is a great word. Thanks for your poem in the allpoetry extravaganza - temptation contest. Best of luck to you.
Lisa -
Wow. Sends shivers. I love it. The repeadily used "Juggernaught" gives the poem it's beauty. And the very last lines, "A soul I rent tonight.
He had so much fright
Now I leave no light
Remember my name earned by rites.
"Juggernaught.""
Are absolutely wonderful and are a perfect ending for this piece.
Keep up the good work, and good luck in your contest. -
wow i must say this is a great poem. a friend told me to read some of your work! Good luck in the contest!
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ahh, this is really nice. I like it. you did a wonderful job writing it! I love the emphasis on Juggernaught. good work! good lukc int he cotnest!
Crimson -
This is not something I could enjoy reading about too many times as I tend to like the lighter side of things. As far as your piece goes, it really made me feel uncomfortable (which was the main aim I suppose). So you succeeded in your aim. The darkness in this is pervasive and the background fits the piece well. Good luck in the contest.
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This is you, all the way. and I jes love it! You are sick and twisted, and Im glad to call you my newest, bestest friend. loves to ya babes,
Jin
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oOo! Creeepy! I like it!
Good luck in the contest!
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