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Pisces

Who can feel the pain of others?
who is guided by empathy?
who with a bleeding heart,
feels the pain of all humanity?

Who's head is always in the clouds
in their world of fantasy,
where they bring
their world to life artisticalley.

Witness to the difficult task
of straddling this divide,
between the human and the spiritual world
they see their soul inside.

They are pulled in two different directions
constant battle of right and wrong,
confusing cycle for pisces
aways wanting to belong.

Their intuition becomes their strength
always guided by their soul,
what other people need from them
they always seem to know.

Chameleon like in nature
when ever in the need,
they will connect and adapt
to whatever they believe.

Waters of consciousness
is pisces sea of thought,
flowing feelings and believes
sometimes leaving them distraught.

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  • UniversalVoice gold member
    September 19

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    WELL WRITTEN!

    That was great! You said it all and being the 12th sign on the zodiac, we are the culmination of all the other signs - actually we are the grandparents of the zodiac too - lots of wisdom deep within. Keep searching for your purpose - just when we think we know it - something else comes up to direct us on another path........but we've never the original path no matter how many turns.

    Keep up the excellent work!

  • GizmoFox
    September 19

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    You have captured Pisces (Me) quite well. This section says it best.
    "Waters of consciousness
    is pisces sea of thought,
    flowing feelings and believes
    sometimes leaving them distraught"


  • Gd66uk gold member
    August 18

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    A soul bared is a soul shared

    Oh how i can so relate to this, this is me !!! lol. And yeah im a piscean too Charmingly written you have taken the piscean soul and bared it for all the world to share, thank you i enjoyed reading this so much


  • Ronztrek gold member
    August 10

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    Dear Pisces,


    This was truly a wonderful insight of getting to know and understanding Pisces better. Astrology is the past little while has caught my interest and intrigue quite strongly. I can no longer deny it's relevancy in human nature, even in understanding my self better and interactions I have with different signs.

    This was very educational, oh and so well penned
    Thank you so much for sharing.

    Your Cousin,
    Cancer


  • inder.
    June 17
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    v.true

  • darell
    June 12
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    Powerful!

    As a Pisces myself I can attest to
    most of this. You seem to understand
    yourself pretty well. I believe it all
    begins with knowing one's self.
    The path of a fish is lonely and filled
    with melancholy days. caring for others
    brings grief and despair. The price we
    pay for such a precious gift.

  • fathom me
    May 30

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    I the title could also be in the lines of "Thinking People" as you seem to have described people other than Pisces too Off to send this poem to my Pisces' friends Kunjal.


  • paw-writer silver member
    May 17

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    Being a Pisces myself, I can relate to this very much. You have done a wonderful job in showing the essence of how our pisces minds' work. Nice! Blessings, Patty

  • wow

    this is very inspirational and i like it alot


  • Mirthryl
    February 29
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    Pleasant road-map to the mind of a Pices! Good rhyme and slant-rhyme. I'm not certain I understand the conflict in stanza 4, the "two different directions," unless it is sometimes "wrong" to "want...to belong?" Lovely 5th stanza, describing the strengths of intuition. I believe a consistent meter would add to the strength and flow of this write.


    • Pisces rainbow
      February 29

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      when you feel as if something is wrong yet no one else seem to think so it could cause a bit of a struggle between what you believe and what others believe because we all want to fit in. thank you very much for reading and commenting. GOD BLESS

      • Mirthryl
        February 29
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        Thank you, Pices rainbow, for the additional insight. Sounds like the conflict is between choosing to follow your own intuition or the 'group-think' (or don't-want-to-be-bothered stance) of the herd...

  • LadyLavender gold member
    February 28

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    I'm a pisces and this describes me to a "T". Its not easy being born under this sign, but I wouldn't want it any other way.

    Love this.


  • MustangTommy
    February 27

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    My wife is a pisces and I'm surprised at the many similarities you describe, so it looks like you really captured what a pisces is. I like the flow and rhyme in this write, good job!


  • -echos lament-
    February 22
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    i am a pisces and this really describes me!

    one typo i would like to point out,
    "alway guided by their soul..."
    "alway" should be "always"

    i really like the rhyme; it fits and it is not forced at all. i also like how you illustrate several aspects of a pisces personality without making a novel or overcrowding the poem.
    great write!


  • Jalalbad gold member
    February 22
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    EXCELLET IN EVERY WAY!


  • doesne1care
    February 22
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    thts just amazing! brilliant flow! loved it


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    February 20

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    Excellent

    Excellent and well written composition in the description of the nature of a Pisces".
    Great Flow and written Beautifully!

  • Jim
    February 20

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    I like this poem a lot. It's deep, and I was able to relate to your second stanza . I wish I knew more about Pisces.

    The rhyme works well. My only quirk is it seems like the questions in the beginning should end in question marks.

    Who can feel the pain of others?
    Who is guided by empathy?
    Who, with a bleeding heart,
    Feels the pain of all humanity?

    Other than that minor detail, superb job.


  • a dozenglassroses
    February 19

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    Wow! and how there are people out there just like this the piece is absolutley amazing I am glad you brought a poetic twist to this well done!

  • Swangrnv gold member
    February 15
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    wow!

    I'm nearly passing out!
    I cannot believe the words you have penned here! It is a true description of how I really am! being a pisces
    and having an interest in astrology in general i always tried to corelate my life to what the sign says about me. While it isn't 100%, 99% of the time it reveals who i am, much like this poem! excellent work!


  • LittleMoon silver member
    February 15
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    This was my Fathers star sign and it is true of his personality traits. He was true water until the end as he was in the navy almost all of his life. I like your poem here. I know nothing of all the technical aspects of poetry that some folk speak of but I know what I like to read - and I like this.

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