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Spring Joy

Dusty windows accented by bluebells,
feathered musty home,
breezes refresh,
tulips and daffodils peek smiles
after sleeping deep freeze,
lifting spirits  from sadden damper
lovers kiss as pollinating bouquets

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  • Chrissy03
    January 30, 2008
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    lovely


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    September 27, 2007

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    This was bright and cheerful and the imagery was wonderful. I love the rebirth of springtime and your short verse captured it perfectly. Peace, Liz


  • DancingRed
    September 26, 2007

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    Ah the joys of spring! You've encapsulated the feeling beautifully.

    "feathered musty home, breezes refresh" - I thought this line could do with a little more work - perhaps it could have been split into two lines, even.

    "sleeping deep freeze" - love that phrase.
    I think you've got an extra space in the second last line but this is a very lovely piece.


    DancingRed.


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    September 25, 2007
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    gushes of spring kat love it..so refresshing xxp