Dont you remember my sweet baby chubbyness?
Dont you remember my first cry?
Dont you remember my first right guess?
Now how come you treat me so much less?
Dad i've grown up. yeah thats true
But unfortunately i grew up without you
In my childhood years not once!
Have you ever attended my school concerts.
Yes you were working
Getting the money
yes you were tired..
But you could have atleast called me honey
You had your day offs as we all do!!
But you never took us out for no occasion... did you???
I didnt really know you until i was ten
And when i knew you.. i just realized "damn"
The man i loved and missed for so long
My idea of you was totally wrong
Now my idea of you is right
I know well now..you aint no knight
I now face you at your worst
Now any dream and love for you i had, is lost.
Now you put your anger out on me
It hurts unbearably dont you see??
How can you count only my mistakes?
Why cant you see how much it all takes?
You dont like anything i do
You say, you hate the way i sit, talk and chew
You hate the way i dress, the way i look
You hate my friends, my fav. book
You hate the way i laugh and the way i frown
Will you ever stop running me down??
You brought me beyond the point at which i care
I dont care what you hate, just dont share
I now dont try to be better in your eye
And that am still your daughter.. thats a lie.
I stay in your house and follow your rules
But behind your back i do all i choose
You put me in a corner, in a cage
Hell aright,just wait till the right age
I know i only got a little to wait
When im gone you will miss me, but too late
If you even love me somewhere deep
But thats not enough dad and your love, you keep
I dont want it anymore
Im gone now, and have another man to adore
Not a man yet but one day he will be
And in me he sees all you didnt see
Just a few years and i'm gone
Ofcourse i will still love you some
You gave me life
And for that im in your debt
But you never kept me the way you should have kept
You will get all the care and love when you need it
But i will always remember that i never got the love from you when i seeked it
You will never ever have my trust
You will never get any deeper then the crust
you will always be my d-a-d
But you will never know that you never told me you loved me
Author notes
I have serious trouble with my dad...always had. But dont care anymore.
In a list
A contest entry
- Abuse?.... by RaZorBladeHugs.
540 points, ended November 10, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please tell me what you think
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o i see, i understand it now,
You say, you hate the way i sit, talk and chew
the comma after u say i aded and now i get it
u might wanna change that, lol
i was sorta out of it reading it the other day! ur welcome! -
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i will change that i guess.thanks
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stanza 3 line 6, help i think theres a mistake there but i'm not shure wat's it is suposto say!
let me know,
i like this one i see ur point if i had more point's i'd add u to the list but at this momment the other poems r butter, srry
i doo love it!!!! well writen and everything, it just dosn't have that effect that the other poems do when it comes to abuse. thanx 4 ur entry! good luck, if i get enugh ur in there...
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sorry i dont understand what is it you dont get, can you type in the actual sentence and tell me what is it that concerns you? thanks for the comment and i am glad you like it. though i wrote this a long itme ago, its still true :S
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powerful and emotional. I felt the same way ...I wrote my father once, but in reality things never changed...just nice for me to imagine it could...he passed away now...so things will never change for me...love your poem!! Excellent~blessings always~ Trisha
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Sweety, this poem is so powerfull! Its stuffed with anger and am I guessing right when I say bitterness?
Parents are not always fun to have and some should never be it, but I admier you for walking away with your head lifted proud, becaouse you should be!
Its not easy when parents dont pay enough attension, be proud sweety, because you have all rights to be!
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very deep my friend...I felt the same way about my daddy...I wrote a poem simular to this and a few years before he died I gave it to him...he read it and never said a word...but he completely changed his attitude towards me...I really think you should give your DAD a copy of this poem...you may be surprised what a difference it could make! Great job by the way...Keep up the great work!
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bravo
Oh, man, this is enough to melt a heart of stone! So powerful and so very poignant! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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You expressed your emotions clearly. I'm sorry for your pain, you're probably right not to expect him to change, but when you said:
"Just a few years and i'm gone
Ofcourse i will still love you some
You gave me life
And for that im in your debt
But you never kept me the way you should have kept
You will get all the care and love when you need it"
I felt like you were handling it well for your age. Things might not ever be great, but don't give up. Age has a way of softening men, especially dads.
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O...M...G.
omg. omg. omg. omg. omg. I have never in my whole life met someone who feels the same way about my dad the way I do, omg. I feel the EXACT same way as you do. Wow.. I have had some troubles with my dad too, I haven't seen him in a year, and he couldn't care less about seeing me for holidays... he doesn't respond to my emails, my calls... hmm. But he wasn't abusive, my step-dad was. Well, I guess I couldn't care less about seeing him anymore either. Really great poem, I could relate really well. omg. I'm still stunned
~PANDY~
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awesome
well written...only beauty can come from truth..
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Wow.
This is actually amazing.
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Wow! This is really deep and very sad. Sounds like me and my Mother. She treated me this same exact way. Read some of my work and you'll see. I'm so sorry for this pain your going through, there is nothing worse than the abuse from a parent, I feel you here, heart and soul. Many hugs to you
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I'm so sorry...
My dad was pretty strict, got lots of spankings, a little physical abuse as a teenager, but not real bad. He would frequently take us out to nice restaurants and things and he had a great sense of humor that was easy to tap into. Just like the weather, sunny days and storms. Mom was sunnier, but still had her overcast days too!
I hope some day you and your special friend can find your way to America where you can raise your children with love and respect.
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well I've always had problems with my dad and hey he used to beat me too but bleive what I'm saying if he died and you was not beside him you will feel worth than now and you'll never forgive yourself I know that it seems he treats you wrong but mabe he's doing this without known sometimes parents and because they care they dont say anything to not hurt us and usualy specially dad dont know how to show that they care beleive me I know mabe my dad have treated me so wrong I mean he used to beat me till I bleed but still he dont deserve to be hated from me not his own child
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