Thus flow the trembling molecules,
The waddling bonds of tortured compounds,
Within these chambered sepulchers:
And I'm convinced I desire you.
The tubes, the grainy tissues
That coil within the cranial confines
Merely react to the combinations,
The myriad stimuli:
And when I see you, my ribs expand,
And hot oxygen gets sucked in,
And my fatigued pupils dilate,
And all is well in the disdainful world
That cares not for me nor I for it.
What tattered dreams
Shoot across the saline cascades,
And flashes of your heart-rending beauty
Are imprinted in some primitive lobe,
And a million ancestors cry in dissonant unison
That you are the one, indeed,
You are the one.
But then, almost unexpectedly,
You cower and run,
And I have no recourse
But to succumb to the whims of haphazard destiny.
I shall not love you,
Because you have abandoned ruth.
You simply tempt from some Olympian distance,
Eased by the sport I provide
When I spill astringent tears of untempered loss.
Author notes
I was a little tipsy when I wrote this, I hope that doesn't disqualify me. Enjoy!
Thanks!
- El Gio
Written September 30th, 2003
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excellent
If this is your brain on drugs, Gio, then I say - hooray for EtOH-!!!
I do believe that the only true aphrodisiac in the world is the sight of lust in the eyes of a man you love....but, alas....these days, there is no such man in my life. Ah, well. I will play the part of voyeur, I suppose. No great chore when the view is such as the one you've given me here. Awesome work, my friend. And, congrats to whatever lucky lady inspired such an ode. 
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Yes, your wife.
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Is the subject anyone that I know?
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very vivid write, I enjoyed this poem as a whole, there is no best part to it. I think that sometimes being under some influence or another helps us to write more freely at times. The transition of emotion and the continual expression throughout this poem put me in a thoughtful mood. Well done. Thanks for entering.
-Khrei -
lovely
Shoot across the saline cascades,
And flashes of your heart-rending beauty
Are imprinted in some primitive lobe
i love this stanza aloth wets thats cool poem
wish you luck in your contest
asmiati -
I find this piece fascinating because you ran through my mind from passion to sadness... The first part give me a sensation like if this will be a sexual poem then you just turned into angst giving an extreme combination of feelings. I love when someone plays with my emotions like this... That makes your poem a pleasing writing to read. -
Looks like a winner to me, no matter what your condition when you wrote it. Very descriptive, wonderful imagery, of course, its always good when the guy gets the girl, but in reality that isn't always the case. This is a good example of 'the one that got away.' Good luck in the contest, I think this is a valiant entry!!
~ becky
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