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Sagacity His

The wisdom brought with years,
a wrinkle here and there
but slight, not easily seen from afar,
the light in his eyes
still shines brightly
from the days of his youth.

 

As a child he had dreams
about an old man,
a foot race
in which he forever lost
to the man whose face
he now owns.

 

His years aplenty,
his knowledge great,
his legs no longer as swift,
he recalls the dreams of old
that still come to visit
occasionally leaving him tired
and out of breath.

 

Yes, the sagacity his,
judgement clear and astute,
not one in the village
could stand up to him
in his wit,
this well-respected sage
who at one time
lost races won by an aged man
in bygone dreams.

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  • raspberry Greeters member
    October 8, 2007

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    Very well written.. very prophesic and a very neat presentation. Thank you for taking time to enter this honored piece here Good luck.


  • captain howdy
    September 25, 2007

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    Wow! I love the story you tell in this! So talented!


  • Sweet Jane
    September 25, 2007
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    GREAT POEM.


  • leo2
    September 25, 2007

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    Sorry, my mind wandered off because the photo resembles an older version of a man I know. There are those people who by virtue of age and experience and intellect inspire awe and admiration. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


    • pattyann4500
      September 26, 2007
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      Thanks, Leo. I just loved this picture. I think I'll keep it. Hugs, Patricia


  • MargaretG
    September 25, 2007

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    This picture reminds me of the sage that Maa has on her page, I wonder if it is the look, or the very individual. That is a moving story, how the boy's dream motivated him to become the man.
    Your poem is circular, I always enjoy that, and your words are well chosen. Good! Good luck!

    • pattyann4500
      September 25, 2007
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      Thank you, Dear Margaret. I truly fell in love with this picture. The pure beauty of it is amazing. The contest page has an explanation of the piece required. I'm glad you like it. hugs, Patricia


  • HeavenScent4U
    September 24, 2007

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    wow sis, i haven't read the prompt or inspiration for this poem but i love it, it's wonderful. it's full of emotion, draining energy and vivid imagery, quite wonderfully done my dear best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed

    • pattyann4500
      September 24, 2007
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      Thanks, Sis. I just loved this picture when I saw it. Since the young lady running the contest is a very dear friend, I wanted to write something very special for her. Hugs, Patricia

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