In the garden of sweet memories,
At the pool of love and joys,
There sits a child like angel,
Praying for unborn girls, and boys.
Dear God be with each child unborn,
Let someone please give them a voice.
Don’t let them be thrown out like trash,
Please let the child make their own choice.
Give each one a chance to live on earth,
Make a difference in the lives of others.
Maybe one of them could be the one,
To make a better world for their brothers.
For the ones that meet such an end,
Bring them to this garden here with me.
Let them live here in the land of memories,
Sadly of which they will never be.
A contest entry
- Rose Angels' penman PIF CONTEST 20/20 by Rose Angel.
525 points, ended September 25, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Time to upgrade those green shinies again! by Nicada.
1000 points, ended December 11, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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An important message shared here, and it is so true that we never know what that child might have become in ths life. Every life should get that chance. A beautifully sad write. Great rhyme and flow. Thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty
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Beautiful piece with a strong message! Love it!
Enjoyed the read!
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Thank you, it was just a feeling at the time.
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The rhyme in this is very good, not forced at all. I'm not sure if "joys" should have the s. I know you did it to rhyme, but I think in this context the plural should be 'joy.'
The only part of the poem that seemed awkward was the last line 'Sadly of which they will never be.' That is just clumsy and a bad ending to the poem, in my opinion. I would rework it. I tend to think rhyme is weak when word order is so drastically changed to get the rhyme.
Other than that, the poem flows well, invokes a beautiful picture, and has a strong message. -
This is a wonderful write...as for the unborn souls who were not given a chance; they are with God and will live one day.
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This was for a picture prompt and this is where it took me.
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I love gardens, they are just so everything, beauty for the eyes, nice scents for the nostrils, soft, warm, I could go on and on, but a great write
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this is fantastic brother. you did great. children are so special and deserve to grow up
"Give each one a chance to live on earth,
Make a difference in the lives of others."
thank you for sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always
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This poem has a lot of meaning to it and you should be proud that you can write something so meaningful! Keep up the good work!
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Thank you. This was a picture prompt and this just came to me.
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How touching, and what love for children you have...It is God given, and so may it ever be....The mercy and love flows, compassion, and Gods' protective hand you pray over them....You are one special person with this burden for all children everywhere....A wish for success in this contest.
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