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torn

im torn....

ripped apart heart in hands

bleeding a never ending stream

i scream, i scream for help

i scream for you

my sobriety, my only reality

you left me

torn and cold

you watch now as the blade caresses my skin

once again

you laugh at the tears that sting my cheek

just waiting for me to jump off this peak

im torn

your happy

i hurt

you heal

i cut

you deal

i cant let go

you left me here

left me here to die

to cry

alone in the dark

surrounded by my inperfections

shot me

and went straight for the heart

now im torn

-vunerable-

torn apart.

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  • Sidra Sabella
    September 26, 2007

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    break ups are horridly sad,usually. love makes it much more complicated when it just can't work. the flow is interesting,but it has a nice anguished tone.
    i hope you feel better.


  • xblakxrosexremainsx
    September 26, 2007
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    i cried

    it reminded me of a guy i really love its so sad.. n touchy......
    im speechless about it.


  • I will stand by you
    September 26, 2007

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    this is a very good write. I liked it because this is exactly how I felt after I screwed up with the guy I love.


  • frenzy
    September 25, 2007

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    This poem has a nice flow. It really illustrates the emotional heartache that you are experiencing I know how you feel, I have gone through lost love, and it's never easy. The only thing you can really do is give it time.


  • Live-By-Love
    September 24, 2007

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    Great

    "im torn, you're happy, i hurt, you heal, i cut, you deal" very powerful and I love it. I feel the same.

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