My obedience to lashing abandonment to my back,
carrying it through life like a self-subscribed cross,
like a crow of judgment sitting above my head
cawing his mericilous “You are not worthy..”
at every attempt I have been hesitant to make
to traverse a map of unforgiving land
How a dove’s melancholy evening prayer
wishes mercy through the night but I lay
contorted with insomnia that has a name and a face;
a ghostly vapored figure giving voice to loon call
and glimpse of lone goose within willow’s mend
in hopes to rise again.
I am exhausted in this loss of loving you
and keeping moonlight’s memory alive
where lack of supportive echoes rise upon mist’s
emptiness that folds me tired and world-worn
of flesh and bone absence in this vile vision of you
I am hollow reed to dry lip and dark vision
that plays a single sad flute on sorrow’s
self-actualized trail of tears that one must have tread
to ever begin to visualize how nailed I am to this
Author notes
Used all word prompts from word bank:
obedience
hesitant
glimpse
figure
exhausted
mercilous
memory
tired
mercy
melancholy
mend
judgment
insomnia
supportive
emptiness
traverse
visualize
voice
vision
absence
A contest entry
- closed for judging...LONELINESS. by Summer Dawn.
800 points, ended October 9, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i truly love this poem. yes, very poetic and very well written. beautiful job of using the words list.
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ty for the hm
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Amazing
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ty for commenting. I appreciate it.
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very poetic. nicely done
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ty whisperedsilence. My poetry is my life. My lfie is poetry.
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Job well done.
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I have one word...Amen...Peace, Rhonda
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aw, bless your heart. I need an amen today! Gradndaughter being born as we speak.
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