Footsteps fall
To heartbeats fading
Echoes lamenting-
Testimonies to your
hushed departure
My hopes, once hung on shooting stars:
Dissolve into watery anonymity.
I should have known that shooting stars
are really just beauty falling.
Author notes
Inspired by Virgoan's 'Dead Stars'
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3276228
Please do take a look at his poem- it really is remarkable.
I don't feel as though my poem needs any explanation- does what it says on the tin.
A contest entry
- Dead Stars by Virgoan.
500 points, ended October 12, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"Echoes lamenting-
Testimonies to your
hushed departure"
hehe... this is something i've always thought and felt but never quite been able to express.... how easily you do so in these 3 little lines... i guess these lines capture the whole essence of the poem!!! but more so, i'm impressed by the contradictory words you've used: lamenting/hushed... hats off to you!!
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Excellent! Succinct writing at its finest. The words, lines, and thought exhaled by this piece makes one lose a moment to wander and wonder beauty falling.
Well chosen ending. Love the after effect.
Thanks for sharing best of luck.
VIRGOAN
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I like this a lot. The splendor within the lines is absolutely enticing. I do so admire the innovative and imaginative talent that I see busy at work here. It's always a pleasure to view firsthand the productive formulation of another's thought processes put into work. Keep the ink flowing my friend!
♥ Touchof1der -
Wow
This is remarkably beautiful. I loved your words and verses. The poem flowed very nicely with the simplicity. Very well-written.
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