Wake up with the dying light
Of twinkling stars
Their delicate memories
Seen in your heart
Remember how at such moments
your past matured
The concepts of Life and love
In your minds eye
Would you feel the longing
Would everything be okay
Let the sunrise hit your eyes
Let warmth tingle
In your fingertips
And know that someone else
Is standing right beside you
Despite the distance
From another time in your life
Flashing through the same memories
Feeling the same way you do
Wondering if you're okay
And how things would have been
If the time you spent together
Could have been endless.
Author notes
this is for us three muskateers. love sucks sumtyms doesnt it huns. lol love you guys.
this ones for the pain we've been through.. the good tyms... and the bad ones with..life.
A contest entry
- Never Forget, Never Let Go by trista.
450 points, ended November 30, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comment if you like..
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You have some really lovely images and thoughts here, and I like the message I got from the poem...which may or may not be what you intended. It speaks to me of friendship that lasts through time, and even if the two people aren't necessarily close any longer, there is always that connection between them.
Thanks so much for your entry, and good luck in the contest. I loved your last 2 lines especially.
Best wishes,
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i enjoyed reading this one too, so full of passion, and keep it up
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thankees
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I enjoyed this one vey much.
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thankees!
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Very good
I like the subject the flow and the rhythm of this poem. I also really liked the images of 'dying light of twinkling stars' and 'sdunrise hitting your eyes'. Well done
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thank u so much glad u liked it!
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Losing someone is never fun....boy do i know that...i know a special someone who i'd love to read this poem. If only i could tell him that is how i feel....timing sucks too. great write!
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wow thank u... feel free to show it to him/her... i dont mind lol. well tek care... hope things get better for u
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Very direct and meaningful. I enjoyed reading it.
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thank u
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From here ;
"And know that someone else
Is standing right beside you..."
On, I absolutely loved. I keep reading it over and over, I really liked this. -
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thanx glad u enjoyed it
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eh...be glad you had muskateers in the first place...beautiful communication and whatnot
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lol thankees... haha.
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I'm really feeling the messge in this piece. Sometimes we get physically and emotionally attached to someone and something beyond our control happens to seperate us. Then we're left wondering "what if?". Thanks for bringing these emotions out through your work.
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thank u! ... ya dats exactly it ...
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This is a really good poem, it has a nice flow, and some wonderful imagery.
It's the kind of poem which will mean something different to every person, which is a hard thing to achieve, but you've pulled it off really well
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thank u so much ... im glad u liked it
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This is an awesome message to send to a loved one in an emotional bind. I love it.
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wow! thank you!!!
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very good
memories, stars, life, love, sunrise
i really like the imagery
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thank u so much!!!
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This appears to me to be the kind of poem that means something significant to the writer, and we as readers are truly left with our own interpretation... I really like the way you have written your thoughts out here... free flowing and without inhibition.
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thank u! hmmm nice heart.. wonder how u do that!
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it's brilliant
everythings bearable if you've got ur muskateers to back you up
seej
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haha thanx seej
yes it is isnt it
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Great job!
Boy it is tough to keep up with that name of yours Niece! LOL Great job on this piece, true, life love can suck, hoping you have many more of the good times life offers. Keep up the great work!
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thank u aunt!!! lol.. yes the name changed haha.
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