Your body is a work of art
Not just the ordinary painting you see everyday
You see the artist took his time to create you this way
Successfully sculpting you into the shape of a Goddess
Molded with affection into perfection to be honest
The way your smile lights up a room is plenty evidence
That every single detail was drawn with elegance
Starting with a face, with eyes that snatch me
To the softness of your lips; the way they curl up when your happy
Topped off with long hair that reaches the small of your back
And that curly baby hair that's on your neck in the back
Equipped you with breasts so expertly fashioned
Skillfully curved, cupped with passion
From your breasts to your stomach, he chiseled a naval
And threw in a pair of hips, to keep you stable
Down to your ass, so sensually rounded
Flawlessly lumped, exquisitely mounded
To those strong supple thighs that work as a team
To house the prize that makes me rise, and resides in between
From your calves to your shins, to your cute little feet
Polished with a paint job to make the sculpture complete
He used the world's greatest blueprint to configure your figure
And I'm so glad I've been chosen to cherish this picture
My desire for other works has fully deceased
Because my eyes were pried open, when you unveiled this masterpiece
As I think about this work of art, and beauty is what I see
I hypothesize and realize, the artist designed you just for me
And he didn't stop there...
Once he finished the frame, he added the most distinctive part
He picked up a lump of gold, and molded it into a heart
And he colored it with an attitude compatible with mine
Making everyday we spend together magical times
Then he touched you with his brush, giving you life
Synchronizing our heartbeats, creating my wife
Creating this angel so perfect for me
Naming his finished work, Kaila Marie
In a list
A contest entry
- Writers guide to love by only1love4ever.
380 points, ended November 8, 2007, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me understand by Misfitdepressive.
900 points, ended November 17, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - One Whole Year: Collection Point A by Death of the Author.
600 points, ended December 1, 2007, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me all you got! by okadadokie.
600 points, ended January 6, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Face You Love Most by Shapla.
440 points, ended February 23, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - L.O.V.E!!!! by Condemd RyeZing.
555 points, ended February 27, 2008, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow...this si amazing!!!!
i love it comletely.
i wish a man would write one of those about me...
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Amazing. Absolutely amazing. Great work. Beautifully flawless. and the flow is amazing. thanks for entering.
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"Making everyday we spend together magical times
Then he touched you with his brush, giving you life
Synchronizing our heartbeats, creating my wife
Creating this angel so perfect for me
Naming his finished work, Kaila Marie"
Beautifully written.The whole piece paints the picture of your beloved perfectly. Great Job!!!!!!!!Good luck in my contest
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Oh wow, I absolutely love this.
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You have earned many trophies with this prize write. I was surprized that you used a lump of gold as the imagery for the heart. Being gold is so cold and heavy. Still, a great write.
Kelli -
LOve the words BUT
I hate green
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wow, breath taking! Obviously I'm not the only one that thinks that, congrats on allll the trophys, i really enjoyed this piece.
Be well and be blessed
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Wow.....This is wonderful. Your wife is a very special to have you for a husband. And you in turn are very special. Love the write.
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Love it! so much love for your wife! beautiful! thanks for your entry and good luck.
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great write. thanks for entering and best of luck
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Guilty (Everybody's guilty)
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Pure love in perfect words
Wow i agree this is unqiue and so beautiful. So heartfelt. Wow. You clearly love her very much and i love the way you described her and the imagery you used. Hopefully one day somebody will feel this way about me. Well done. Thank you for entering the contest xxxxx -
this is the most unique, and wonderful peice of writing that i have ever seen, your wife is very lucky to have you, i must add, and you are so talented. I can not stop hearing your words in my head, each line is so smooth. It is absolutly wonderful! thank you for entering it into my contest. Best of luck!
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hot hot hot i think you did a great job on writing this i like reading poetry like this
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Hmm this was good, really sweet and I love your descriptions but it didn't flow too well to me. On the other hand I did really enjoy it and the way you moved from body part to body part was nice. Some of the rhymes weren't great but most were good, some more imaginative than others.
My favourite lines:
To the softness of your lips; the way they curl up when your happy
From your calves to your shins, to your cute little feet
Polished with a paint job to make the sculpture complete
And he colored it with an attitude compatible with mine
Making everyday we spend together magical times
Then he touched you with his brush, giving you life
Synchronizing our heartbeats
Thank you for your entry and I am glad to hear you have someone this special on your life
Take care and good luck! x
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Oh My God, this is brilliant. this brings your wife to life to everyone who reads. thank you so much for entering into my contest and i wish you the best of luck in this and in your life
cheers
Jen
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ughh, why must u have a way with words? lol anyway I LOVE THIS BABI ITS SOO BEAUTIFUL!
*MWAH*!
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Awwwwwwwww....The imagrey in this one is really good. "baby hair" haha. You went all out on dis poem for real and I guess you had good inspiration. It really flowed. This is a great poem about your love. I love it cause you took the time to make this rhyme of a lil sis of mine.
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I absolutely love the last stanza. *sigh* I love how you left something to the imagination in this. You can see the love in this. Thanks for sharing!
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Blown Away
Daaaaaammmmmmmmmmmnnnnnnnnnn...........that made my heart wanna leap out because you are so aware of the raw beauty inside and out of another human being.........I've never in my 37 years heard anything expressed so masterfully in a way that captures the true insight and appreciation we see in others............Can't find the words I want to capture how this made me feel............Refreshed.......
Thank you...........Drea
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...... DAMN, DAMN, DAMN DAYUMM. This is by far the best poem I ever read from you. You done got a lot better Eltee. "Once he finished the frame, he added the most distinctive part
He picked up a lump of gold, and molded it into a heart"
a heart of gold huh? That is just... Man you need to to get an Oscar for this or whatever the highest award for poetry is you should get it cause this is crushin poetry.
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Aw, Eltee this is so sweet!
You and Kaila are THE cutest <3
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