My words are not the ones I say out loud,
But the ones I want to.
They're not the scribblings I write down,
But the ones, in soul, so true.
My words are not the ones you hear,
And the ones you judge me for.
The words I say are not as real,
As the ones I need to show.
In words, united we have been,
For ages, centuries, decades.
But none of us have ever seen
The truth behind these cheap facades.
Author notes
Written during Physics class
Candy Coated Acid Trip
Edit: Option 5, one of my favorites
A contest entry
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Some "Words" about it? :D
Comments
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I almost feel like you wrote this about me. I do the same thing, I'll be thinking one thing but can't bring myself to say it. You captured this well, thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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Scribblings can afford to be more honest, real sometimes, it's true.
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Interesting, to say the least. I'm still surprised at the things that came out of my pen at the most random times. Like, when I was 17, I got bored in Accounting class and ended up with a novel
It's strange how our minds work... Good luck in the contest!
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I think that's what we all call talent, don't we? Deep down, inside every one of us, there's this spark. Spark that can, as you said, come out in the weirdest moments!!
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boy this has been entered in a lot of contests! Pretty soon the law of large numbers will apply and it will have a trophy beside it. Thank you for entering.
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i dont know what exactly to say except that i "get" your poem. if you know what i mean?
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You have definately managed to write something that's quite thought-provoking here. Had to read it a few times to get as much as possible out of this poem, but there's still a blank for the second line.
I kept wondering about it, but didn't really find anything that could solve the mystery for me. Only thing that remains is the question: want to what?
I also noticed the rhymescheme you have here. Although it is very well done, maybe that's the reason why this second line seems unfinished, because you wanted it to fit within the rhyme?
Anyway, I'm not really the one that enjoys repetition too much, but in this piece, I actually loved them
it gives much more strength to your thoughts that way
thank you for entering this contest, wishing you the best of luck!
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Leander, thank you for your in-depth comment on my poem. I actually loved reading through it. Yes, the rhyming was the little devil that made me cut the second line. I thought it was...like...
"My words are not the ones I say out loud,
But the ones I want to. (say out loud)."
I thought that it was understandable, seeing the first line and its ending. I see many had a problem with it, ha-ha!
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Well, poetry is always understood the best through the author's eyes
and honestly, when I write something, then I get almost always messages from people who read it that they didn't understand parts
so I'm guilty too 
Thanks for coming back at me
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So I suppose I am not the only one then, ha-ha! Some of my poetry is "easy", to say so. But I have this way of complicating simple words that it makes your head spin. Really, some of my poems, not even I fully understand!
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Wow, lots of contests.
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Hi,
I like some of the things you said here....the rest I just don’t get....This poem is only partially punctuated, there are mis spellings and just plain phrases that don’t make any sense.....
My words are not the ones I say out loud,
But the ones I want to;
They're not the scribblings I write down
But the ones, in soul, so true.
I am not sure what the semi colon is for at the end of the second line....I am not really sure what line two says... a comma after “write down” ........like this.....
My words are not the ones I say out loud,
But the ones I want to. (Want to what???)
They're not the scribblings I write down,
But the ones, in soul, so true. (Also, what does this mean)
The rest of this I will change the punctuation.....
My words are not the ones you hear,
And the ones you judge me for.
The words I say are not as real,
As the ones I need to show.
In words, united we have been,
For ages, centuries, decades.
But none of us have ever seen
The truth behind these cheap facades.
So......try to come up with a point.....and this poem could rock.......TTFN Love Laurel -
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Thank you so much for commenting on my poem! God, punctuation is NOT my best point! Yet, I feel like I have to clear this up for you! I mean, I do have a point, ha-ha!
'My words are not the ones I say out loud,
But the ones I want to. (Want to what???)
They're not the scribblings I write down,
But the ones, in soul, so true. (Also, what does this mean)'
It should've been "but the ones I want to SAY"-but I thought it could be understandable...because I used "say" in the first line as well.
About the last line-I mean our real thoughts, being written in our soul, trully. Scribbling are ...like a metaphor I used to suggest the imperfection of the lies people keep saying.
Also, thank you for correcting my punctuation. I'm off to editing!
*hugs*
~Viviana
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I like this poem alot but its not really what I'm looking for...But it really is a great poem keep up the good work!
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Wow thats great
Short and sweet..
wrote in class... brilliant!
Good luck in my contest
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The words I say are not as real
As the ones I need to show.
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I like this specially to be written in Physics class Ilove this.
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Beautiful, Deep, truthful, and inspiring. Not many poems inspire me, but this one did. Amazing job!
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true poem, I like it! I f only we could say what we really mean, but yeah, sometimes that's too hard! Good write.
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Well I really like it. It's definitely true that words aren't nearly as important as what's behind them. Geez, I don't understand how liars can do it....
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Wow. This poem really made me think about some stuff. It's very simple but I still find it somewhat complex. Indeed, the words we need to say most are the ones that only make it past our thoughts and are usually never spoken aloud. Very good write.
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I really like this piece, the simple fact is, we are words....at least that's what I've somehow stepped away from this piece with, enough so I may write. Thank you for sharing
Angel aka WoundedAngel.
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i like the concept of this poem. Its true to all , i would imagine. i think though that it is spelled
"facades" not "fassades" unless there is an alternative spelling. good job
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Brilliant poem! The words left unspoken always pound louder in our minds and have a greater effect on us, than the ones spoken aloud.
Good luck in the contest.
Chemical Kisses,
Emily x
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No words
speechless and left with no words...
I love it. I can relate to every word you wrote. I was reading the other comments and I dont really think I got out of it what they were seeing. The great thing I love about poetry is that everyone can get what they need out of the words we write. Although they may not see the intent we were leaving behind, they always get something out of it for themselves. I love that. With this poem as I read it, I fell in love with it's meaning it had for me. My whole life the simple "how are you's" have been difficult to answer because no one really wants to hear what we have to say. The words we all speak are meaningless because none of us seem to express what we really mean because society doesn't encourage it. There is nothing more than simple words in each of us that need to come out. I love this poem and I hope that one day we will all be able to say what we need to say and express what our souls have longed to express. Keep up the great work
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Thank you, fellow poet, for your understanding (And I mean, REALLY understanding) comment. You know, that was exactly one of my points: Why even bother asking how someone is, if you don't really want to know? I've seen so many people asking me...and when I actually told them how I really felt...they didn't even care. But it's happened before that even when I just answered "fine", REAL friends have been able to see trough "that cheap fassade" I put on...
Thank you again!
~Masky
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Great write, sometimes words mean nothing, or just aren't enough. Good luck in the contest!
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VERY LOVELY AND SAD ALL AT THE SAME TIME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I agree!
I can identify a 100% with this poem. this says something id really want to tell someone i care so much. not many people understand how it feels!
its good u could catch it.
this is an amazing poemn and u disearve my 3 applause!!!
Goood GOOOD awesome JOB!!
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Thank you so much!! It means a great thing to me when people say they can relate
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Words are unnecessary, they cause pain. They can cause you so much hassle and loose you your closest friend.
A look can get you so much more, or a small gesture, a hug, a smile, and people will know everything is ok.
Great write (for someone who has just said words are useless i sure do talk a lot )
Keep it up
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Hey, talking is okay. As long as I see through your words, and I did so
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that's good it's still a great write, is it ok if i print it off to put on my wall of fame?
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Well, I suppose it's perfectly okay Wow, now I feel important, lol.
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this is so true. We are judged for the things we say amd sometimes people cant stand us for it but if they would look behind the words maybe then they would understand.
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Exactly my point
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words are useless...never manage to capture the real thing...so,I will applaud in an absolute silence.....
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physics is always a good class to write in! i did. i like it a lot, all the secrecy it potrays and tepmts to give away. it seems short though...?
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i think i understand what you mean, i can relate to that. i don't usually tell the 'whole' truth, because i don't think others can handle it, maybe i don't give others enough credit
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