Forecast for this week
Lows on Monday expected
Distress suitably
A contest entry
- The Far-Eastern Theme Haiku Contest by NoWayJo.
600 points, ended October 10, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Super Huge Contest!!! Allmost Anything Goes!!! by Horseartist7.
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What an interesting haiku, but what a bad forecast!
Good luck in the contest(s).
Kudos. -
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I think if you switched the last two words (which isn't necessary, or perhaps even desirable, but just to make a point here...)
Forecast for this week
Lows on Monday expected
Suitably distress(ed)
you see that expected is past-tense, so the last line, still part of the forecast, should be past tense too. Optimally then:
Forecast for this week
Lows on Monday expected
Distressed suitably
or
Forecast for this week
Lows on Monday expected
Suitably distressed
GLITCH!
(an acronym for: Good Luck In The Contest Hon!)
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I LOLed.
Cute.
Sorry for the lack of depth, but I suppose turnabout is fair play. ^^ -
Excellent haiku.
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Thank you again for this entry, Carly.
My grandmother used to call Mondays "Blue Mondays," and your haiku reinforces that thought in a fun way. I really like the play of words in "distress carefully!"
Jo
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I'm guessing as this being your last post, this is the haiku you made mention...
I really like the play on words in the last line...and I know that "lows of Monday" feeling, especially this being one of those Mondays.
Great haiku, and pass me over a mssage when you're on, OK?
Jo
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