Slayer of men, lay down your arms!
Remove your faceshield of war!
Hide not in guise of passion's allure--
cease to tempt my heart before
it's ensnared by deceitful charms!
A contest entry
- Short and meaningful by tender-butterfly.
470 points, ended September 26, 2007, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful
Oh my... I must say thank you for sharing this piece with us.
This is realllly a great piece of poetry... I just love it.
Well done and all the best to you.
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Wow! I'm very honored!! Thank you so much for the gold! I thought for sure RatherImaginative had it! Thank you very much!!
Sheryl
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Love the rhythm of this piece! It's good to see that there are still a few who like good meter.
My only suggestion for this otherwise excellent piece is the about the exclamation point within the parentheses. I'm not sure it's needed. Perhaps move the exclamation point from line 2 to the end of line 3 outside of the parentheses, thus making them one sentence . . . just a thought. 
Best of luck to you!
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