This is a curse worse than fate
This I know and will debate
A broken heart that's torn apart
Was destined, and I played the part
You killed me with a knife to the heart
My life has come to an end, I will now depart
You shoved it deep, all the way through
But my heart wont bleed one drop for you
You ended it and I lost my life
You said you loved me, What strife
I believed you though it was a lie
Now all that you do is wait for me to die
I wont give up that easily
Just pay close attention and you will see
Though you pierced my heart
I was determined from the start
Even if I gave in
Trust me you'd never win
because even though I lost my soul
And its not you that will console
I will patch up the hole in my chest
And go on and live life like the rest
It will mend one day
Im not sorry cause this I must say
You have broken me one too many times
Given me plenty of inspiration and rhymes
But I will no longer dwell
On what you had me believing so well
Im going to move on with my life
Trying to forget you and all the strife
I will pull the knife from my yearning heart
go on with my life making for myself a new start
Goodbye my love, Goodbye to you
This is something I have to do
I wish you all the best
To me you were just like the rest
Im sorry you didn't measure
Up, though you brought me pleasure
You brought me more pain
Staying with you, I see there's nothing to gain
So I will say this one last time, I love you
I only wish you loved me too
Goodbye baby, Im sorry if I cause you any strife
So anyways, I wish you the best, Have a nice life
Author notes
My ex who I am still very much in love with hurt me a lot and this is about that pain and how I was feeling long after it happened.
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awhee, this was sad. i liked the ending, it was good. nice write filled with real emotion. thanks for entering and good luck.
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Well,
This one hits so close to home not only in the fact that I went through it myself. but also the fact that I have gone through it more than once. It was difficult and very painful, but I knew that the only way to come away from it was to put it behind me, learn from it and grow. Thank you for commenting.
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I liked this, the ending was beautiful. I'd say that it is a duplicate of so many other poems but I knwo when you wrote it you weren't focusing on the words and originality as much as the feelings.
I can relate to this, and still going through it, it's tough to leave someone and try to move on specially if they have left you broken.
It'll take time to heal, a long time but it'll heal just don't be worried of trusting again like me and you'll heal.
Good luck in the contest and well done for this poem.
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Awww. That was good. Good luck on the contest!
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Being in love with your ex is one hell of a roller coaster, I know. The pain here is ohh to real to me. Great work
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wow very sweet
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wow! this is very deep and it pisses me off bc the same thing happened to me and im still pissed bc of it.
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i'm sorry,
i started reading this and
i just can't finish it
sorry, it's a wonderful poem
ur doing a good job
you hit those feeling stright on
your poem just reminded me so much of how i felt
abot someone else
well i must say i'm glad to hear
i'm not the only one who could feel that way
giving up someone you love and not crying
is one of the tuffest things ever
and when reading your love sick poem
to forgoton land,
it reminds me of him and all the pain
you did a gr8 job
you hit this topic deep
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I can relate
But if you can recover and fight back, was it ever true love? That is what I struggle with. -
beautiful. i love the rhyme and the depth to the poem.
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Very deep. I have felt this knife in the heart before, though I just mourned and did not walk away. Good luck in the contest. Keep on writing.
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This is really good.
Just like how i feel anout my soon to be ex bf.
He cheated on me and lied about everything.
ANYWAY! Keep wrighting!
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Thank you
While I wish it didnt happen I know I learned alot from him and so I thank him and it would be a good idea for you to analyze your current relationship with him and deide what you learned from him and even if you dont like him for what he did thank him for showing you certain things or for teaching you a valueable lesson. Anyways keep your chin up things will get better.
Xoxoxo,
~Night Mistress 1~
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