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Do I dare..?

What I wanted,
what I needed
what I yearned for most of all.
The longing
that I dared not dwell upon
in the light of day,
yet succumbed to
so readily
in the depths of
dreams.
Forbidden,
demanding,
dare I say...
unholy...!
Yet sought for,
with a hunger,
a voracious appetite
all too often
uncontroled.
Dare I but speak it's name..
once...
aloud.
Set them free..
all my tortured , wanton thoughts
that so lure
me
to the darker side
of my nature...
Do I dare...
Do I dare....?
Do I dare....?

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  • individuality gold member
    June 1, 2008

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    a good piece of poetry, we all have to dive into the pools of our darker side, to swim in the waters and feel what it is like, then when we return to the light we can dance with faster pleasure knowing we are on the right path.


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    November 13, 2007

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    Very nicely done - I enjoyed this very much. Sharp and crisp, with extra baggage. Good job.

    Thanks for taking the time to write and to enter this contest. Best of luck to you.

    Paul


  • Silly Rabbit.
    October 7, 2007

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    Wonderful use of the prompt. When many are faced with temptation, they ask themselves the same question: Do I dare?
    Very well done. Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest


  • tanzanite
    September 26, 2007

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    Do I dare ...

    Wonderfully apt this piece. A monologue a lot of us carry around with us. Wel written too. This is free verse done well. I loved this. Good luck in the contest.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    September 25, 2007

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    wonderful imagery like a delightful

    meal. I had this sick twisted dream about DAVID SPADE?
    oh I know gawd I woke up in shock and totally grossed
    out...he's not my type at all! I told my husband, and
    what mistake that was! somethings I guess should be
    just kept private in our dreams, and so for David
    Spade, oh gawd...just going to dig him out of my dreams.
    lol
    Wonderful poem, loved the imagery, flows well, and
    we can all relate to it too!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen


  • thepoetssoul
    September 24, 2007

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    Very well written piece filled with wonderful imagery and flow.You did a awesome job with this one If I could speak a name and set my tortured mind free I would!I really enjoyed reading your poem
    Best of wishes to you

    Tony


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    September 24, 2007

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    ths was a beautifully expressed write which has left me thinking
    i loved the questioning style and it flowed beautifully

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    September 24, 2007
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    The poet pens a piece which is multi-layered,the religious thread is an undercurrent,the passion quelled by self discipline within the realms of all that holy is good but oh,the ache of the spirit freed by dreams and the longing to be undone at the seams...
    Temptation indeed.


  • xxMyBellxx
    September 24, 2007
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    Amazing poem. )))))


  • HeavenScent4U
    September 24, 2007

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    wow i like this. kind of right on the verge of going for that tempted thing but still not quite sure. just my interpretation very well done my dear hope all is well, haven't talked for awhile be well and be blessed my dear

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