He’s no ordinary boy
His eyes are like fire
They’ll burn right through you in a split second.
No smile is ever seen upon his face;
His hands are in fists and thrown inside the pockets of his jeans.
His head bent low, as if warding off anyone who might steal his soul.
No, he’s no ordinary boy at all.
His black hair in spikes on his head.
Tattoos adorn his arms and back.
Never seen running with any pack.
The other boys make fun of him
But he ignores them and walks off
Girls love him
Because he’s mysterious
He never shows emotions
His thoughts are a mystery
And no matter how hard you try to figure him out
You will never succeed;
He has everyone around him fooled.
He’s no ordinary boy
He knows neither happiness nor joy;
He’s not the type to look at the stars
Or write silly love songs for girls.
He could care less if he’s liked
He draws in class, little pentacles all over his notebook
No one can get through to him at all.
He eats lunch everyday alone on a bench just outside of gym
He listens to the sound of the other boys playing basketball inside.
The teachers all tried to encourage him to join a team.
But he will not succumb to such nonsense.
He’s no ordinary boy
Yet everyone wants to be like him.
Although he looks like a loner and doesn’t much care
He gets good grades and studies
No one knows what he feels inside
How everyday he wants to run and hide.
He’s no ordinary boy
Everyday he goes home to hell
His father comes home drunk from the local bar every night
And him and his mother always shout and fight.
He hits her around, oh how he can’t stand that sound
Of the alcoholic demon in the living room beating on his mom.
He’s no ordinary boy
His mother puts him down because she’s unhappy about her own life
He never could understand how he could be blamed
Because she was the alcoholic demon’s wife.
He lives everyday in fear
All because his father has one too many beers.
No.
No ordinary boy at all.
A contest entry
- AllPoetry Extravaganza--3 Month Gold and Silver Membership by Violet Moodswing.
1500 points, ended November 28, 2007, 67 entries
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Some good emotions and excellent thoughts expressed here. Some rhyming is nicely done. In some places it's a little too much like prose for me but generally a nice job.
Thanks for taking the time to write and to enter and best of luck.
Paul -
Sad but a strong well written message.
I like it very much. A very well worded story line. You hit hard with a sad but very strong tale that has a beginning and an end. I feel his torment, his sadness and passive rebellion. I liked the fact that you don,t throw in words out of context to make the lines nonsense. Perhaps as a math major I am unable to see the beauty in that so I unkindly refer to it as Slobber Drivel. I am convinced the Alan Ginsberg's Howl was so named for the effect it had on the readers and listeners. I like your work.
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You touched me!
Your poem shows there is no such thing as ordinary and that it simply cannot be known what demons mold us into what we become. Outstanding understanding of the human condition!
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This was an amazing piece of work. The repetition of "He is no ordinary boy", is very effective. Your description sends one scurrying into the boys' soul and I love that about this piece.
Your words just got to me. Living with alcoholism can break someone. Your piece reminded me of that again. Brilliant work. -
rip our hearts out and leave us pleading
What an Incredible writer you ARE! You write with
soul and impact, absolutely love it! You my dear are
a lighthouse, a moonbeam, will read every word of you,
you beamed forth your light, but not too strong as to blind, just uncover us with your words so we are not
afraid. Excellent job! and by the way, Black & Blue
broken promises make excellent hoes and shovels to dig
out any obstacles in our way!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )))
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You have penned some very strong and descriptive emotions. You brought forth real, raw feelings that allow people to relate to you. Good Job all around! This poem has such a powerful impact from start to finish, one that tugs and torments the heart and soul... a familiar feeling brought out here. This is a beautifully written piece... painful, yet gorgeous in its language.
♥ Touchof1der
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