If you were just a woman
I could live without you... for a time
Now you have become the vessel, that holds my heart
so I ache in the night, anguishing for your amazing love
praying for the time, you will touch me... again
Richard Lee
Author notes
The greater the love, the greater the anguish
A contest entry
- Missing / Longing in 5 lines! by Beating.
600 points, ended October 8, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Master the short poem by Turtledove.
475 points, ended November 9, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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such beauty in your words congrats on the gold
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2 Lost
Welcome to the site
Thank you for saying beauty
Rick
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Congratulations! Nice.
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TMK
Thank you very much
Rick
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my dearest friend love truly emulates from your wondrous soul. Your words touch the spirit for they are filled with true emotion and heart. well done and many blessings always xxxx
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Stardust
Thank you for seeing me in this light
You are very kind
Also, thank you for having me on your page
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Rick my dear friend I cherish your wonderful spirit and your friendship brightens everlastingly. I am blessed by you and as my page says you're one of my many very very dear loved friends and as long as i'm on this site you will always be apart of my page and my heart xxx
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Wonderful
This is filled with beautiful emotion and love. Very well written. Good luck in the contest! -
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Hi My Lady
I just had to say that
Love your comment to me
Thank you for your carefull reading
Rick
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The Vessel............
incredible write!
Soft and yet.........powerful!
Keep the pen going!
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Guess What...?
This became a Gold
CooL
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Morning Stef
Yes... the vessel
Thank you for saying "Incredible"
Great having you read my thoughts here
You know the sorce well
Rick
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As Turtledove said... inspiring! Very passionate and captured a lot of feeling in a few well written lines!
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Hi Kiwi
Thank you for carring for my words
My old writing Mentor used to say
"Every word, must earn it`s way into a verse"
Good advice in matters of brevity
Rick
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Lovely, inspired me
Such a nice bit of writing. Short and sweet. Thanks for entering. -
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Turtledove
You are kind to care for my words
I thank you for the Gold
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Hi Turtledove
I realy liked your contest
I love packaging a lot of thought in a few words
I had to enter your contest
I thank you
Rick
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I am awarding you the GOLD for this one, in my mind.
This is a splendid poem, so filled with precious yearning... who could resist such a thing?
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CooL Mel
Thank you for seeing, so far into my words
I almost read this in tears, after making the thought
Thank you for saying splendid, and for the three Smilies
Rick
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How true! And yet the greater the anguish, the greater the potential if you seek to love again... Minimal word but a powerful impact! Congrats. on the HM, Ithica
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Ithica
Thank you for reading me
Brevity is the soul of wit I am told
Rick
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I guess that can be true. The great the love, the greater the anguish. I really like this piece, because it's so different from all the other entries. It has a kind of old romance to it. I love that!
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My Queen
Thank you for caring for my words
I like my writing to be different
Rick
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once again...AMAZING.
heartfelt words of truth when we are without the one that keeps us in tact.
great job as always and besti wishes to you.. NOW that is a first for me, I hardly ever see you doing contests.
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Hi Vic
Very rear I do a contest
The PIF needed to be accomplished
Rick
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This feels extremely personal. It's interesting me that heartache can often bring out some of those beautiful words and emotions. Nicely penned poet. Good luck in the contest!
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Hi Rick,
I couldn't help but think this was written a bit out of the ordinary for you, but then I saw it was a 5-line contest. That explains a lot.
I thought you did a fantastic job of getting the feeling of anguish across to the reader. This is something soooo many of us can relate to. Really nice work here, and I'm sure "she" must feel very much the same way. Love and best wishes to you both...
~J.
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Hi Trista
Thank you for your fine words
NO ONE... feels this way for me
I lost everything, in a day... Great
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When one becomes apart of the other is always a breath taking feeling but when they apart from us it can like one's own self is missing too. Brillant Write and best of luck with your publishing!
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beautiful
Well if she reads this
you can be sure
she will touch you once again
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How beautiful my friend! This may be short, but wow! you said a lot with this one!! You did an awesome job capturing the "missing" feeling in this one! What a great read!
This is one I can definately relate too.
Best of luck in this contest!
and much love my friend
Nyetta
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damn!!! i must say this was short but u know what what more could u say. well done. i love it alot. great write
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If you were just a vessel, I could live without you...but touch me again, just praying for that time. Wonderful lines...with a hint of sizzle! ~Sie
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A wonderful write expressing such true longing and loving. Yes to love deeply is also to hurt deeply. I told someone once that "If i didn't love you, you couldn't hurt me as bad as you do." thank you for sharing.
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So lovely Mr.
I think you really are the best poet here on AP,
please don't tell all the others I said that LoL.
This piece is just as great as all the rest.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Love Ya,
Joyce
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Yearning is truly evident in this one...and your author note makes me think...the nights are always the worst time for the anguish...good luck in the contest...peace, Rhonda
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very deep poem! Line 3 is my favorite part. It's so beautiful and symbolic.
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What a blessing to be so deeply in love. Amazing is the human heart...longing for that one that completes your existence. I will pray that all of your dreams and desires are manifest so soon! And always forever...your days and nights will be spent in wonder and sheer happiness. This is my fervent prayer for you my friend.
Love~
Suzie
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O why aungish
ask her to marry you and be done with it.
Smile,
Judy
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Judy
We have that covered
Thank you for your thoughts
Smile,
Rick
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lovely write, better than mine, well described anguish,
I agree the greater the love, the greater the anguish
perfectly said and good luck in this contest
much love,
Michelle
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Hi Michelle
I think we both did a good job in this
I realy related to your words
so I made my own
Thank you
Rick
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