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I finally

I finally
get a taste of you
and now it must end
the tides of times are against us

pain gets stronger
but the [love] lasts longer
and i cant seem to choose
which not to feel

overwhelming pain
but lasting [love] is strong
reach out and touch my cheek
maybe then i can take a breathe

 

time and pain

rule the nights and days

you cant say which is last

i finally get a taste of [love]

 

I finally

can see your face

before the darkness creeps in

overwhelming pain

 

i finally see your [love] for me

and now you dont have to hide it

grimacing and groaning

creeping darkness

 

let the pain come overtake you

and take your last breathe

i finally am happy

and now i see it [love] in your eyes

 

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  • laugh at me
    October 2, 2007
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    absolutely beautiful!! I love it


  • freebird88
    September 29, 2007

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    This is an outstanding poem! I love the torn feelings between giving in and giving up. I think we have all felt this way for someone, and you tackled it very well. The flow was beautiful, and imagery amazing! Kudos!!!


  • Raining
    September 26, 2007

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    NICE POEM im suprised you didnt win (you should have) good job i love it!


  • SarahEatsAirplane
    September 23, 2007

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    wow this is amazing.
    I abba so lutely love it.
    its gorgeous!

    haha but yeah i love love love this.
    [love]

    bookmarked babe