When the stars stole you, I broke
into those thousand pieces that you cannot see
and you can't be here to hold me
because a whisper stole you
so I'm left, fighting for a way to breathe
Author notes
When your heart grows roots in another, there is no way to lose one and step away undamaged. The deeper the roots, the deeper the tears that their absence leaves.
My dear, I loved you, and if I could join you, I would. But for now it is my path to be the lonely one. So that is who I will be.
A contest entry
- Missing / Longing in 5 lines! by Beating.
600 points, ended October 8, 2007, 34 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Excellent write and deserved of the gold Congratulations on a poem well written
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wow. I'm really impressed with this piece, I love it. You made the death of this person seem poetic, yet your pain and longing was as real as ever. Just amazing!
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bravo. well said for the given prompt.
Indeed held my attention and made me ponder. great job and best wishes to you in this contest
Tory
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