I can't love you Saturday
and forget about us Sunday.
I can't live this split life
knowing you're only a half.
I can't run with tied feet
grounded to my deep roots
This tree that raised me
gave me shade, gave me life...
One foot in the dirt,
one wing in the clouds.
So I've lost my footing
and gravity couldn't keep me.
I'm beyond it all now;
way up there with you.
It's just you and me now,
But we are free. And loved.
I can't wait to feel sunshine.
I can't wait for the peace.
Too young for all of it.
Too terrified to even think.
The reward will be sweet.
The consequences - few.
If I keep following my heart
and holding you close.
We're white hot with passion
a burning need for the other
Bottomless beautiful black eyes
paired with gentle ocean green
What have I done?
I've loved you like a fire
and felt the reflected power
Now, I'm dancing in the flames.
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wow...
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woo
at first i thought this was going to be a backwards rendition of a Cure song but thats because i only read two lines and gave up ... k
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wow, kind of leaves me speechless this poem...I've never been able to write metaphorically, you have great talent, it's good you embrace your heart on Allpoetry, what would we do without it?
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0o0o0o0o I loved it.
Good job madi. IT really spoke to.
Excelent write. Keep up the good work.
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Definitely Wow...
Know exactly what you're talking about, so I suppose that helps the meaning of the poem. Very good job Madison, and I know you'll figure out what to do.
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wow indeed!
Have you been kissed again? Lol. Wonderful write. Keep
that pen handy.
Joe
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I can't love you Saturday
and forget about us Sunday.
I can't live this split life
knowing you're only a half
I actually lived that part for about 4 months and it was fun, but not something that i am proud of. Hah, i like how you asked yourself what have i done and made that be the title,thats what last stanza nd it got me hooked on that poem.love it. -
uhmm.. idk if they will like starr or asterick this out. but Damn. wow, mads that was amzing. one of the best i've read. weirdly enough. but that was great. i could feel how real it was. when reading it.. chica. stay strong.. loved it..
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sounds like love
this feels like a real story.. as real as they come... so if it is id like to know what has actually happened so i can understand all the symbolism metaphors and beautiful imagery better. i love it how it is... i would tell you not to change a thing. the last verse is my favorite... keep up the good work and thanks for sharing.
ali
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