Tempted by the hand of fate,
desire the bite of the bait.
Dangled there before the fall,
longing rules need in us all.
Something shiny, the brass ring,
taking chances not often seen.
Should the spirit feel compelled,
to make that dash that may dispel.
Wanton need in vacant quarters,
planted seeds of distorted order.
Temptation owns an awesome gleam,
coaxing lure of enticing scenes.
The want or need be the queried quest,
temptation's draw captivates the best.
Author notes
Resisting it all the time makes for a drab uneventful life.Calulated risk is the piece of resistance spice of life.
In a list
A contest entry
- AllPoetry Extravaganza--3 Month Gold and Silver Membership by Violet Moodswing.
1500 points, ended November 28, 2007, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Temptation is something that can be our karma in the end I believe lol. I think you did great and wish u the best of luck!
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This is a little different indeed. Nicely written with some interesting thoughts and pleasant slant rhyming.
Thanks for taking the time to write and to enter and best of luck.
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I like the slant you took on the contest theme. Risk is important - necessary anyway in the quest to make art.
Good luck in the contest.
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Wow. I love this! The rhythm and rhyme and diction all flow together to make it into a truly wonderful piece. It speaks of the truth of temptation written in a beautiful way. Wonderful use of the prompt. Keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest
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Very good
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Loved the last two lines. I thought it was wonderfully written. This was a solid piece. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks for your entry. Seems you hit the nail on the head. It gets the best of us. then again I think that sometimes we mistake just plain ole enjoying the life we are given with "succumbing to temptation". You would think that we werent supposed to enjoy anything
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goodness, you are a living
word bank, wonderfully done! Sounds like it just rolled
out of you, sweet flow too.
Great poem!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
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Wow! what a fantastic take on 'temptation.' I think you covered every corner, nook and cranny! Great job! Hugs, ♥ Belle
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Only one Man..
Has been able to beat temptation completely. I know this ugly monster gets me every once in a while. Great poem describing the lure & catch feeling we get afterwards. (Well most of us anyway.) Thanx for the reminder for I read this just before work consider it a "warning" for the day!
~Ron~
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temptation indeed
Whimsy and satire this lovely poem of temptations
attire..yes indeed we fall easy prey when all rules led astray/// tragedy of life..inspiring poetry.
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Hey now,it can have a happy ending leap of faith too.
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Critique in a word
Excellent!
yes yes tempted by the hands of fate..
one need not think or hesitate
or do we?
I couldnt resist thinking marraige and then divorce...could there be other meanings hidden in this wonderful write?
love it
Mal
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That too. Yet there's a plethora of tempting epic want and or needs.
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Temptation is the juice that is squeezed from desire. Great poem.
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Now that is a fact! It's a rapier of sorts and a pungent spice of life too. Thanks for reading.
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Yes! A very important distinction you touch upon here.
I'm focused on this theme with my children. To know the difference between 'want' and 'need' is the strong foundation for making the right choices.
Excellent....good luck with this write as with all
you pen. I find so much enjoyment each time I visit your pages. Blue
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That pleases me to hear.And I thank you for reading so faithfully.You must know I value your opinions too.
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