I had it Lo so many years
starting when I was born
but now that I am 83
it's presence has long been shorn
It followed me day in - day out
Allowed me the happiest of days
gave me strength to carry on
in oh - so many ways
What was this mystic potion
that enabled so much fun
kept me going from morn till night
making sure my chores were done
It wasn't a magic potion
And Everyone shares in its joy
YOUTH is what we called it
Sort of a God-given toy
Would have been so nice to keep
But it only lasts a while
Only there for a certain time
as age takes it out of style
Oh to be YOUNG again
Mr. Doug
A contest entry
- AllPoetry Extravaganza--3 Month Gold and Silver Membership by Violet Moodswing.
1500 points, ended November 28, 2007, 67 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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lol the thing is I am 26...my biggest thing is wondering what it's like being old and sort of being afraid to get there!
Well done and best of luck
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Ah yes, I rememeber it well. Just not sure when it ends. Different for different people I imagine.
Thanks for taking the time to write and to enter and best of luck.
Paul -
Thank you for your temptation poem. 83 - that is beautiful. You've seen and experience so very much. Not sure I'd want to go back - keep the youthful spirit in your heart.
Probably uncapitalize the YOUTH and the YOUNG - seems like you are yelling those words. Best of luck to you in the All Poetry Extravaganza.
Lisa -
A very practical poem. With youth comes temptation. I can understand why you chose to use it as your subject. Even though it's not described, it's common sense to know that the two are joined.
Very good use of rhyme. The rhythm and words flow together wonderfully.
Keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest.
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So Very True
We don't appreciate it until we lose it. I really like your work.
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Del20
Thank you for the kind comment regards my poem YOUTH.
I sure do appreciate it - my best to you and yours
Mr. Doug
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Youth does seem to slip away but the petulance of youth is almost always replaced by the grace of wisdom and knowing. I find that as I grow older I long for the nights when it was easy to stay awake and not worry about fatigue, but I also do not miss the countless insecurities I had. Life is so much more rewarding once we get rid of those. Well done though and good luck in the contest.
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Youth
tanzanite:
Thanks for your comments - I do appreciate them -- -
Mr. Doug
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Thanks for your entry
Youth, indeed. Seems to slip through the fingers regardless of what we do about it. I like the way you refer to it as more "mystic" than "magic". Thought provoking and fun write. I enjoyed reading it.
Best of luck in the contest. -
reminscently fun and delicious
like hot buttered corn, it was just yum yum yum.
Thankyou for a great write!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
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Youth
Kathleen:
Thanks for your very kind comments - I appreciate them.
My best to you and yours
Mr. Doug
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beautiful
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A pleasant read,the jubillance apparent,especially liked the reference to youth as a kind of God given toy.Am not so sure that the inclusion of Lo helps the piece though that is not a criticism just a humble perspective.A thought provoking piece,reminds of the old adage "youth is wasted on the young" Indeed the young wish to be older ( adore the way they use halves-how many adults say I am 33 and a half? ) and adults wish they were younger,good luck in the contest and with your writing.
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this is an awesome poem!
heres to youth =)
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I agree to that.. And life is like a rowl of toilet paper, the closer to the end, the faster it goes.. hehe
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What a charming poem,how wonderful it would be to be young again..life does tend to rush,I feel it as fall is ready to set in,lovey poem,good luck...MM
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