All that's left of you now is
the warm air and sunshine smell of your lips
lingering on my skin, while the rain of my tears
pours salt into the wound that was once my heart...
Author notes
...this is a feeling we all know, whether it is the beloved, or the mother, or the friend...aches remain...
A contest entry
- Missing / Longing in 5 lines! by Beating.
600 points, ended October 8, 2007, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow. you really express so much sadness and pain in this piece. It's so strong. And yes, the ache will probably always remain. But hopefully it'll get smaller as time goes by.
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What a painful ending but so well expressed. You have certainly described this well. Good luck in the contest!
♥ Touchof1der -
Perfection once again dear friend.
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excellent write for this contest
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the wound that was
I can see the words dancing even with the tears..very senstive words..
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