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The Town of Halloween

In the town of Halloween
Monsters roam around
Mr. Spider scared the kids
As he slowly crept the ground

Mr. Ghoul and Mrs. Ghost
Watch from their big house
The creepy old scary witch
Tried to smack the nasty mouse

Mummy's nose got all stuffed up
Due to her thick clothes
When the window opened up
In a giant moth did blow

With all the candy in the town
Old Hallows Eve was dear
Moon dance done by candlelight
A monsters favorite time of year

Author notes

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    November 11, 2007

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    Great work on this piece. It is a true gem and I adore it. As for a critique on this, I think you have your rhyme and flow well done and it is well composed. Excellent!


  • Celticmoon
    November 10, 2007

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    Now this was a true treat to read. You've done a remarkable job penning this poem. It flowed wonderfully throughout in my opinion. Some of the rhyme felt a lil off but then it was nothing major. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you!


    Blessings
    Bel


  • leander Moderators member
    November 9, 2007

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    You have managed to wield a beautiful poem with the wordbank you've used. There's also a very steady rhythm inside the lines, not one line felt wobbly and that's very good too! Rhyming wasn't perfect though, but who cares anyway huh

    I think you did it very well in this contest - Thank you for entering and I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander

  • lyrebird
    September 28, 2007

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    This poem is so cute. I wish I could celebrate Halloween again, but people look at me like I'm a freak when I try going trick-or-treating. =D Good luck in the contest.


  • goatee98
    September 24, 2007
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    "The creepy old scary witch
    Tried to smack the nasty mouse"
    i love this line


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 24, 2007

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    I love word banks, and it is alwasys a delight to see the outcome of each one. This one is wonderful in painting a picture in my mind of the people of this town...loved it! Excellent write


  • captain howdy
    September 23, 2007

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    Way to work that word bank! I couldn't even tell it was a word bank poem 'til I read the author's notes! Well done, sis!


  • Stickboy
    September 23, 2007
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    hee hee this is cool , you did a great job on this one my friend , best of luck in contest

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    I really liked this you have done a nice job sweety goodluck to you in the contest.Best wishes and much love.

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