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[ raking fallen leaves ]

raking fallen leaves
beneath barren Autumn trees
floating thoughts of smoke

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A contest entry

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  • macandrew
    March 5, 2008
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    I liked the idea of comparing thoughts with the drifting smoke of autumn. Might I suggest space before and after the poem for a better presentation?

    well written.
    John

  • InBetweenThoughts
    October 1, 2007
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    Thank you for your patience and for resubmitting your poem!

  • InBetweenThoughts
    September 23, 2007

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    As the smoke drifts from the chimney the sweet smell of cherrywood in the air, as we rake natures droppings Thank you for your entry, best wishes, Ken IBT