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water-dreaming

 

 

i.

last night -
     rain slept in these bones,
     whispering dreams of water;

     wind tickled
     me warm

until -

 

fluid,
I wept my skin into
sheet

& stained
  myself a clearer shade
  of sky.



ii.

last night -
     dark roots reached for earth
     & origin,

     grappled with these limbs
     to share in thirst ..

each pebble
touches riverbed

      [ once in shaping ]

before currents roll
it ashore.






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  • A u r i e l l e
    September 30, 2007
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    very good. This amazing literature tremendos rhythm. Very sensual


  • poetryality silver member
    September 27, 2007

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    Congratulations on winning the Silver Cup dear sister/friend. I knew this poem had to place and place before mine is certainly what I thought it would do. I am humbled.


    Many Blessings ♥

    Renee

  • butterflywriter silver member
    September 27, 2007
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    This is an incredible piece...

    perfect


  • Namita silver member
    September 27, 2007

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    Sigh~ Sensually perfetc and absolutely beautiful.

    Luv,
    ~Candy

  • Akimbo silver member
    September 27, 2007

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    Thank you,
    this was the inspiration I was looking for:
    Dais Per Diem
    Kj


  • astralshepherd gold member
    September 25, 2007

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    you wrote this on my birthday, not that you meant to write it for me, but it feels very personal with a a profound sense of anticipation mixed with yearning, a dream that awakens itself into being. i feel like this sometimes, not as much as i use to - but before, when the world was soft to me and i would be accepted as 'me' But my inevitability is not yours, our currents too distantly different now, your poems go on where I will only imagine.

    Blessings and best wishes,


    ~r.


  • poetryality silver member
    September 24, 2007
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    It amazes me that sandstone is created from salt water and the sand. The rush of waves enchants me. I love the water Little Sis'. You are a metaphor Master you know.

    This a pleasant drench. I wish you well in the challenge.


    Much Love & Many Blessings ♥

    Renee


  • Jaden silver member
    September 23, 2007
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    Nice.


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    September 23, 2007
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    I felt the waves.


  • Grunts Girl
    September 23, 2007

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    i am surprised you didnt pee the bed
    hee hee...
    just kidding and you know that!!!

    I liked how you dug yourself out of a dark place, found growth after the storms and know it is all about the ride...


  • misselaineous gold member
    September 23, 2007
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  • Dalaney gold member
    September 23, 2007
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    Kate...I could read you forever.
    Lane

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