naked trees dance with
twirling winds and dashing rain--
i sip hot cocoa.
Author notes
"This is a great form of poetry that flows from my thoughts, though the picture I see is greater, I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
A contest entry
- Autumn Haiku by InBetweenThoughts by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended September 28, 2007, 39 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This one's wonderful. It's so peaceful on the surface. You look so very calm, sitting there with the hot cocoa, but then it's also longing and regretful and sad -like from someone in the autumn of their life, remembering the spring.
I love how you can't judge the mood of the person drinking the cocoa- like an unreadable portrait - it's just a bare statement. So it's mysterious and beautiful. It's my favourite right now. -
Amazing, naked trees
I'm getting chills! Easpecially with the winds...thank God for Hot Cocoa Thank you for your entry...best wishes, Ken IBT
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