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A new dress

 

 

 

As a train pulled up into the station

you heard the brakes Squealing out its roars

and the dock that just stood there silently

'Overflowed with voices coming thru its doors.

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Steam from its engine let out a big 'Ol Shhh

as a conductor shouted out "lets go"

so I climbed on aboard in a rather quick fashion

to get a window seat and peak at the snow.

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Last train to Dallas~ in the background 

I could hear one of the conductors say

well you better get yourself A' move-on

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That is, ...Unless you have decided to stay.

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The train pulled away with the whistle Blowin

and snow covered up the entire track

while the train cut through it like butter

movin like it was never coming back.

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The darkness seemed to bring on a silence

in the train car that I was sitting in

as my mind drifted into deep thought

of all the different places that I had been.

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A little boy in the seat up front of me

was quietly whispering a prayer

and all of a sudden he become so still

as the conductor asked him for the fare.

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Sir, I do not have any money

Please understand this was the only way

for me to get back to my mother

they say at anytime she could pass away.

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Then the train came into the station

with its wheels Screetching loud to a stop

the conductor slipped the boy a twenty

pleasantly pointing over to a dress shop.

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You could hear every single footstep

the boy made to the door of that store

knowing he might see a smile

on his mothers face at least once more.

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Returning with a box beautifully wrapped

he sat down and begun to pray

so quietly again I heard him whisper

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                                                                                .

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                                                                              .

"Thank you Lord" for not turning away.

 

 

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  • tanzanite
    September 26, 2007

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    Awesome and it brought tears to my eyes. This story is so touching and I wish that more of us could give so unconditionally. I know that prayer was answered. you told the story so well. Good luck in the contest.


  • Shakes-spear
    September 24, 2007

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    Great job bro!

    This reads like a story and it is. The visions are very real and the story compelling. I loved it and the message, Good luck in the contest, the Shaker


  • luckynsincere
    September 23, 2007
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    What a read this was.... even full of sound... made the beating of my very heart still and silent. This was packed with emotion and meaning. Well done. I see you have entered it in a contest... looks like a winner to me!

    I loved it. Thank you for sharing your talent with me

    Mel


  • poetryality silver member
    September 23, 2007

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    You do know what I like dear brother. I'm all swelled up now. A couple of years ago, I performed in a play called; "bea-luther-hatchee". In Southern-lore, that's the last train going toward death (some say hell). In the play all the sounds you allow us to hear in your poem were heard. I even got a chance to call out designated stops, as if I were the conductor. In the play I portrayed a woman who was actually dead, but no one knew that until the end of the play. The playwright left the audience with many unanswered questions. Which we answered in afterthought discussion once the play was over. I loved that play! It had constant motions, as does your poem. Your work is superb! It moved me to tears. Thank you. Today I needed this most. The best to you in Lane's contest.


    Much Love & Many Blessings Always ♥

    Renee


  • Dragons Lady
    September 23, 2007

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    Very well written. The imagery is amazingly vivid, even the sounds could almost be heard. This write really tugs at the heart. I love it. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.

  • eternal-devotion
    September 23, 2007

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    Absolutely Beautifuly Done.

    MY first impression is that this is a most beautlful poem. Emotionally it reafirms my belief in humanity, as I have seen this done a few times. God bless you for writing something about the goodness that for the most part is a part of most of humanity. The press and others only report and talk about the negative and the good needs to be told more. There is nothing that needs to be nor should be changed in this wonderful poem. I loved every word and verse. The title is just perfect and the first line sets the tone for this very well. The last line is absolutely the best for this. Extreamly well done.


  • chills
    September 23, 2007

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    Yep - this was cute. Does this sort of thing still happen in the world IN WHICH we live? (Grammar in caps!!!) I look about and only see an awful lot of taking. Ah well, lets just say 'maybe'....


  • Celticmoon
    September 23, 2007

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    Darn it Gary why ya always gotta tug at the heart?
    I swear sometimes you do it purposely This is a lovely piece hun. The story it tells is truly felt through your words. Best of luck to you


  • yourhot21
    September 23, 2007
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    aww! This is soo cute and a great religious poem! Awesome job!


  • cutiepie gold member
    September 23, 2007

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    Darn...now I've got tears. You certainly know how to make noise Slight error in the word "setting" should read "sitting" Good luck my friend

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