Finally....
sweet kisses rained
drenching longed for havoc
'pon parched lips.
Sorrows contained, if
just for a little while.
I can forget pride.
Leave behind crumbled dreams,
temporarily delayed.
Those sparkles of pleasurable pain.
Shooting up from numbed limbs,
slept in concrete heaviness too long,
now become reluctant to move.
Awakening...
Completely dumbfounded, I wonder
why did you choose me?
Author notes
Prompt: Contest
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie ~ Sensuality by Namita.
300 points, ended September 27, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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a wonderful and beautiful write here, Hetha, a real joy to read. Thanks so much for sharing,
Evan -
a wonderful and beautiful write here, Hetha, a real joy to read. Thanks so much for sharing,
Evan
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the last line sums everything up nicely and this is gorgeous. Your line "pon parched lips" hit a chord and again, this is simply a gorgeous write.
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i knows where your at
i liked this very much
sweet kisses rained
drenching longed for havoc
'pon parched lips.
especially that section very nice
very nice inded
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Wonderful
Stunning work here. Your words really flowed in this one Hetha. I have to agree that it is captivating, and I read this twice over. Well done on a brillaint piece of work.
All the best
Wayne
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Brilliant write. Thank you so much for entering this beauty.
Luv,
~Candy
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Oh my! This is captivating. You pulled all my strings with this write. Erotic, passionate and filled with desire. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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excellent...
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Wow. Thank god I'm not judging this contest! I'd probably kill myself trying to find the best way to judge it! The passion in this was...remarkable! Sensational! Such beauty! Oh, god! Well done!
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