When you kiss me do you mean it?
Is it not just something that you do?
When you feel a slight attraction;
When you find somebody new
Am I just a face?
And when your lover asks who's there,
Am I just a nobody,
When I call to show I care?
Am I more than just a fix,
To fill the gap between your thighs,
Is there anything more than lust,
inside those burning eyes?
Am I nothing more than a good hard shag!?
Am I something to be won?
And when you have me in your hands,
Do you take out the pin and run!?
Do you trip my switch like im a bomb,
and then eject me with a shove?
Do you start to run away,
cos there's no safety switch for love?
Is it cos you want the challenge,
of winning some other guy?
Do you think about me when you're in his bed,
when you're screaming to the sky?
Do you think about me when you're at work?
When you flick your sassy hair,
and when you see that sexy hunk,
as he bounds wildly down the stairs.
Do the others smell my aftershave,
on the pillows, on the bed?
Do they know that you are lying,
With every word you've said?
Do you think that when you're older,
That you'll be happy and content?
Will you be happy knowing you hurt those men,
When they thought you really cared?
When you are broken and frail,
do you think that I will care?
Do you think that you won't be alone,
that someone will be there?
Do you waste your life competing?
And then find you've got nowhere.
Do you sacrifice your friends, your family,
just to get "up there"?
Do you shed a tear for those you've hurt?
Do you shake violently in despair?
Knowing that you've wasted your life,
Ignoring those who cared?
Does your hair still hang down in sweaty locks
as you feel your own heart race?
Do you still enjoy your fun with the hunks,
when you're nearing 68?
Do still believe that love isn't real,
that were meant to be alone?
and do you still believe you need no one,
as you sit in your retirement home?
No more hunks for you to scream on,
no more chests to place your hands,
You're alone now little hottie,
sit out your daily plans.
Do you pray to god forgiveness,
for your lack of love and care?
Do you pray for someone to love!?
Just someone to be there...
Do you finally see now as you're nearing your end,
that love is a vital thing?
That without it your life is nothing,
just a wild night, just a fling.
When you kiss him do you mean it?
I hope to god you do.
I hope to god that you love him,
In the way that I loved you.
A contest entry
- wow, check me out. by raymondsgirl8708.
700 points, ended September 24, 2007, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For all the good men and the women lucky enough to have them.... by nobodys-girl.
644 points, ended June 24, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
my first poem up here, let me know what you think? thanks
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wow that was amazing i really enjoyed reading it and it really kept me interested. great write!
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I felt a better rhythm in this one. There were some rough spots like;
Do still believe that love isn't real,
that were meant to be alone?
How about; Do you still believe that love's not real
That we're meant to be alone.
I heard a rhythm with all of the questions and found myself smiling at times. I do like the full circle thing you did at the end. Find the rhythm and leave out the unnecessaries and see what you have. I still like it though.
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Gosh no offense but the person in this sounds like such a bitch. Please excuse my language but wow. This poem was written amazingly. Thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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yeah, she was a bitch lol in the end... i thought itd be a good poem to put in the contest because it shows that perhaps its not always just the men
and that both sides are equally as guilty of breaking hearts glad you liked it! it was written quite a while ago now and is the only poem in which i never paused to think about what to write, and everything just came out, even the rhyme lol i think thats why this is my favourite cos its totally from the heart
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oh i totally get that girls are just as guilty. its like a sad endless circle. but you really did do a great job =]
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Welcome to Allpoetry!!
Congrats on the honorable mention. That is awsesome. Some people have to work for ages to get any trophies!! I can see why it won a mention. I am a greeter and wanted to welcome you to the site. Feel free to ask me any questions.
Despair
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I especially loved this part
"Do you trip my switch like im a bomb, and then eject me with a shove?
Do you start to run away, cos there's no safety switch for love?" -
Well when I saw this was in a contest I was dissapointed that you didnt win. I thought this was a great poem. Filled with great imagery, the format was awesome. I get see alot of emotion. You can tell you have alot of pain tucked inside for which I am sorry for. Great write. Blessed Be! ~~Shannon~~
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wonderful write. i love the way you turned the endinging to show what she would be like when she's old if she continued on this path. again, great write and thank you for entering.
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Realllllly good poem, Im not into the longer writes because most writers have trouble keeping my attention, but this was well put together and stayed my eyes. So, welcome to AP! Hope you like it here!
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Wow....first??
Outstanding job,I felt hate,lust,passion....
Rocking!!!
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