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Once More

I want to pierce the veil
which deficiently allows
a fleeting hint of you
when I need to feel you
just once more, once more.


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  • Beating gold member
    October 8, 2007

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    I really like that there is so much more to be found between the lines in this, and it makes it so powerful. It's short (obviously) and say so much. I felt your longing. Great job!


  • The Unknown Poet1
    September 23, 2007

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    this is beautifully sad sweetness it say so much in so little words


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 23, 2007
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    Lovely

    beautifully put. Good luck.